Question

假如你叫李華,打算畢業(yè)后到美國留學(xué),請給你的美國筆友 Tom寫一封電子郵件,內(nèi)容主要包括: 1.留美原因------增長見識,體驗美國文化;
2.目前困擾------語言障礙,大學(xué)學(xué)業(yè)壓力;
3.征求對方建議。
注意: 1.詞數(shù)100左右;
2.可以適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫;
3.不要逐字逐句翻譯;
4.郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好,不計入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Tom,
I’ve finally made up my mind to go to America for further study after graduation. _______________
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Tom,
I’ve finally made up my mind to go to America for further study after graduation. I’ve been longing to go to America, mainly for two reasons. One is that I want to experience American culture, which is believed to be the most diverse in the world, and the other is that I hope to broaden my horizon in this developed country.
But to tell you the truth, I have some worries about this. I don’t have a good command of English, especially spoken English, so I’m afraid I’ll have difficulty fitting in very soon. Besides, I may suffer from high pressure from college courses, which I’m not sure I can handle.
With so many things bothering me, I hope you can offer me some practical advice.
Looking forward to your reply. 
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。要求向你的筆友Tom寫一封電子郵件。介紹你想去美國留學(xué)的原因和現(xiàn)在的困惑，并向?qū)Ψ秸髑笠庖�。要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級詞匯和固定短語準(zhǔn)確表述。句式上要富有變化，簡單句和復(fù)雜句結(jié)合使用，還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來，象for instance, Furthermore,等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】One is that I want to experience American culture, which is believed to be the most diverse in the world, and the other is that I hope to broaden my horizon in this developed country.這句話用了并列句，表語從句和定語從句， I don’t have a good command of English, especially spoken English, so I’m afraid I’ll have difficulty fitting in very soon.這句話用了詞組“have a good command of”精通，和結(jié)果狀語從句，I may suffer from high pressure from college courses, which I’m not sure I can handle.這句話用了非限制性定語從句， With so many things bothering me, I hope you can offer me some practical advice.這是with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)。還有文章還使用了關(guān)聯(lián)詞But to tell you the truth, Besides,使文章更加連貫。