Question

目前，許多學(xué)校對(duì)學(xué)生采取封閉式管理，學(xué)生對(duì)此看法不一。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表所提供的信息，寫一篇短文，談?wù)勛约旱目捶ā?字?jǐn)?shù)120左右)

有的同學(xué)認(rèn)為	有的同學(xué)認(rèn)為
學(xué)校限制我們的自由；學(xué)生和社會(huì)接觸 少；學(xué)生的興趣和愛(ài)好不能得到充分的 發(fā)展。因此……	學(xué)校是學(xué)習(xí)知識(shí)的地方：學(xué)生應(yīng)該安心 在學(xué)校里學(xué)習(xí)；學(xué)生缺乏自覺(jué)性，離開(kāi)了 老師，可能會(huì)……
你的看法：

Answer 1

One possible version：

Nowadays a lot of schools keep their students in school all day long. Students have different opinions about it. Some of the students think they enjoy less freedom and have little chance to get in touch with society. They are not able to fully develop their interests and hobbies. Therefore, they have little interest in their studies.

Some others think school is the best place to get knowledge so they should put their heart into their lessons. Some students lack the ability to control themselves. Once out of school, they may lose control of themselves and do something that will influence/affect their studies。

Personally I think, it is necessary to keep students at school. But at the same time schools should organize various activities so that students can enjoy their school life.I don’t agree to keep students at school all day. Schools should offer students more free time to develop their personal interests。

【解析】

試題分析：本文為提綱作文�？忌弦�就學(xué)校采取封閉式管理為主題寫一篇作文。文章應(yīng)分為三段，第一段寫反對(duì)的同學(xué)的看法，第二段寫支持的同學(xué)的看法，最后談?wù)勛约旱目捶āＴ趯懹^點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，條理一定要清楚，比如用first of all，secondly，besides，what’s more，moreover，last but not least等。寫作時(shí)要充分發(fā)揮想象，以使文章內(nèi)容豐滿，并且要達(dá)到要求的字?jǐn)?shù)。此外，還要注意使用多種句式和高級(jí)詞匯來(lái)提高文章檔次。最后要注意要正確使用連接詞，使文章通順連貫。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文最大的亮點(diǎn)是使用了許多亮點(diǎn)詞匯短語(yǔ)和優(yōu)秀句式。亮點(diǎn)詞匯短語(yǔ)如get in touch with，put their heart into，lack the ability，develop等。Once out of school, they may lose control of themselves and do something that will influence/affect their studies。本句中Once out of school,使用了狀語(yǔ)從句的省略，that will influence/affect their studies，是一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞something。多樣化的句式使文章給人耳目一新的感覺(jué)。在以后的作文中，考生要盡量運(yùn)用多種句式，避免單一，也能給人留下較好的印象。

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