Question

作為一名高三學(xué)生，你或許經(jīng)常跟你的父母就看電視問(wèn)題鬧矛盾。你的父母以學(xué)業(yè)繁重和影響視力等為由阻撓你看電視，而你又認(rèn)為電視能滿足你的興趣愛好同時(shí)繁重的學(xué)業(yè)下也需要放松，最后你們之間相互妥協(xié)達(dá)成了一致意見。請(qǐng)你以該話題寫一篇字?jǐn)?shù)120左右的短文。

注意：1. 就雙方的理由可以進(jìn)行適當(dāng)?shù)臄U(kuò)充，協(xié)議自己想象。

2. 開頭已寫好，不計(jì)入字?jǐn)?shù)

I am a Senior 3 student. I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

I am a Senior 3 student. I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.

My parents hold the opinion that I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future. Besides, they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often, which is the chief cause of short sight. But in my view, it is TV that gives me what I am interested in. In addition, it may relax my mind when I am tired, in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved.

In the end we reached an agreement. Only at weekends am I allowed to watch TV, however, the programs are limited to news, sports and entertainment, not including TV plays. This agreement is acceptable to me for it is beneficial to my study and life.

【解析】

試題分析：根據(jù)提可知道本文屬于話題作文。通過(guò)提示語(yǔ)可總結(jié)出命題者讓學(xué)生寫的話題即父母與自己在放學(xué)后看電視問(wèn)題上的分歧。所以在結(jié)構(gòu)上可以采取三段式，第一段用兩到三句話引出話題，第二段按照命題要求把父母和你本人在看電視問(wèn)題的意見（理由）展示出來(lái)，第三段總結(jié)概括，進(jìn)一步深化主題。在闡述理由時(shí)注意時(shí)態(tài)和長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，搭配適當(dāng)?shù)倪^(guò)渡詞使文章銜接自然。最后總結(jié)點(diǎn)題時(shí)注意呼應(yīng)第一段內(nèi)容和第二段觀點(diǎn)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】

本篇范文開篇點(diǎn)題，直接引入話題I am a Senior 3 student. I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school. 文體部分以My parents hold the opinion that... 引入父母對(duì)于我放學(xué)后看電視這件事的看法和意見，隨之用But in my view...道出我對(duì)此事的觀點(diǎn)，過(guò)渡自然。在列舉理由的過(guò)程中長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，如I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future.和Besides, they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often, which is the chief cause of short sight.文章句式錯(cuò)落有致，不顯冗長(zhǎng)或單調(diào)。其中還使用了定語(yǔ)從句it may relax my mind when I am tired, in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved，部分倒裝Only at weekends am I allowed to watch TV和強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)it is TV that gives me what I am interested in.等。文章過(guò)渡詞也使用的恰到好處，如in addition等。除此之外，文中使用的詞匯難度得當(dāng)，固定搭配使用靈活，都為文章增色不少。文章最后用In the end we reached an agreement點(diǎn)題，并點(diǎn)明主題就我放學(xué)看電視問(wèn)題達(dá)成共識(shí)。