Question

作為一名高三學生，你或許經常跟你的父母就看電視問題鬧矛盾。你的父母以學業(yè)繁重和影響視力等為由阻撓你看電視，而你又認為電視能滿足你的興趣愛好同時繁重的學業(yè)下也需要放松，最后你們之間相互妥協(xié)達成了一致意見。請你以該話題寫一篇字數120左右的短文。

注意：1. 就雙方的理由可以進行適當的擴充，協(xié)議自己想象。

2. 開頭已寫好，不計入字數

I am a Senior 3 student. I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

I am a Senior 3 student. I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school.

My parents hold the opinion that I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future. Besides, they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often, which is the chief cause of short sight. But in my view, it is TV that gives me what I am interested in. In addition, it may relax my mind when I am tired, in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved.

In the end we reached an agreement. Only at weekends am I allowed to watch TV, however, the programs are limited to news, sports and entertainment, not including TV plays. This agreement is acceptable to me for it is beneficial to my study and life.

【解析】

試題分析：根據提可知道本文屬于話題作文。通過提示語可總結出命題者讓學生寫的話題即父母與自己在放學后看電視問題上的分歧。所以在結構上可以采取三段式，第一段用兩到三句話引出話題，第二段按照命題要求把父母和你本人在看電視問題的意見（理由）展示出來，第三段總結概括，進一步深化主題。在闡述理由時注意時態(tài)和長短句結合，搭配適當的過渡詞使文章銜接自然。最后總結點題時注意呼應第一段內容和第二段觀點。

【亮點說明】

本篇范文開篇點題，直接引入話題I am a Senior 3 student. I often quarrel with my parents over whether I can watch TV after school. 文體部分以My parents hold the opinion that... 引入父母對于我放學后看電視這件事的看法和意見，隨之用But in my view...道出我對此事的觀點，過渡自然。在列舉理由的過程中長短句結合，如I should study hard so that I will have more choices in the future.和Besides, they consider that it is harmful to my eyes to watch TV too often, which is the chief cause of short sight.文章句式錯落有致，不顯冗長或單調。其中還使用了定語從句it may relax my mind when I am tired, in which case the efficiency of my study will be improved，部分倒裝Only at weekends am I allowed to watch TV和強調結構it is TV that gives me what I am interested in.等。文章過渡詞也使用的恰到好處，如in addition等。除此之外，文中使用的詞匯難度得當，固定搭配使用靈活，都為文章增色不少。文章最后用In the end we reached an agreement點題，并點明主題就我放學看電視問題達成共識。