Question

【題目】你的周圍有一些高效能的同學(xué)，他們表現(xiàn)突出，這與他們良好的習(xí)慣是分不開的。請就此話題用英語寫一篇100-120個詞的短文，舉例說明他們的良好習(xí)慣，并談?wù)勀愕目捶ā?/span>

參考詞匯：efficient .adj ; 有效率的； efficiency .n 效率

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Answer 1

【答案】

One possible student version:

Some students have always been very efficient at schoolwork, among whom, Li, monitor of our class, is an example. He distinguishes himself as the most productive student in the class.

When asked why he is always so productive, Li responded that it was some good habits that benefited him greatly and enabled him to be quite effective at schoolwork. Li always has a strictly followed plan, for he believes that efficiency depends on good organization. Besides, he makes full use of his time. He listens attentively and takes notes at class, keeping close pace with the teacher. After class, he not only finishes the homework but also makes sure that consolidation work has been done. Moreover, he attaches great importance to critical thinking, with which he never accepts anything blindly.

From Li we can learn that a student’s good performance and success is closely connected with his good habits. Good habits are very important. We may benefit in them or suffer from the absence of them.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇觀點陳述類寫作。這篇作文有這樣幾個要點：第一，談周圍高效人士的良好習(xí)慣并列舉事例；第二；談自己的觀點；第三，字?jǐn)?shù)要求字?jǐn)?shù)為100-120個字，不足或超過都要扣分。亮點分析：結(jié)構(gòu)上采用黃金三段式，使得結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，一目了然。文章采用了許多好的句型，When asked why he is always so productive, Li responded that it was some good habits that benefited him greatly and enabled him to be quite effective at schoolwork這個句子中用了省略主語的分詞結(jié)構(gòu)，時間狀語包含原因狀語的復(fù)合句，responded引導(dǎo)的賓語從句和it was some good habits that強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的符合；he not only finishes the homework but also makes sure that consolidation work has been done中not only…but also句型中嵌套的that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句；he attaches great importance to critical thinking, with which he never accepts anything blindly. 中非限制性定語從句的運(yùn)用，復(fù)合句的多重使用使得本文內(nèi)容充實；本文還運(yùn)用了許多好的詞匯和短語，如distinguish… as，enable… to be，makes full use of，keeping close pace with，attentively，attaches great importance to等，體現(xiàn)了作者厚實的基礎(chǔ)。