Question

【題目】Bearing a resemblance to the forest-surrounded "Love Tunnel" in Ukraine, the two-kilometer tunnel in Jiangning district Nanjing saw a recent rise in popularity as more than 2,000 tourists paid a visit every day this summer. The high number of visitors caused traffic safety concerns and increased the workload of sanitation workers. The Nanjing government had intended to cut the trees by end of 2014; After the Nanjing government was forced to draft plans to cut the trees due to public pressure, visitors poured into a railway section that runs through thick forest for sightseeing and to take photos this weekend, leaving the railway with overwhelming piles of trash.

However, in response to the government’s plan, complaints and outcries were made by the citizens that the love tunnel should be reserved. They claim that walking along the leafy green tunnel is like entering a fairytale, and a possible decision to tear down the trees could bring the story to a pitiful end.

注釋sanitation 衛(wèi)生

[寫作內(nèi)容]

以大約30個詞左右概括短文的內(nèi)容要點。

以大約120個詞談談你對“愛情隧道”該不該保留的看法，并說出你的理由。

【寫作要求】

作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不能直接引用原文中的句子。

作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

Answer 1

【答案】

Nanjing government planned to cut the trees surrounding the “l(fā)ove tunnel” for the high number of visitors caused both safety concerns and pollutions, which gave rise to the objections of citizens.（31 words）

I am totally in favor of the citizen’s point of view that the fascinating love tunnel ought to be reserved. For one thing, it would be a great pity to put an end to the fairytale-like scenic spot, which brings peace and beauty to the visitors. For another thing, in a bid to solve the problem of safety concerns and pollutions, the authority could come up with a way to preserve the green corridor while also improving the safety of both people and trains.（84 words）

Therefore, as long as the visitors and the authorities make joint efforts to preserve the love tunnel, it will surely serve as a marvelous tourist attraction for us without any concerns.（31 words）

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容來發(fā)表意見的文章寫作。首先要對已提供材料的主要內(nèi)容進行概括，因此要對文章內(nèi)容進行準確的理解和再次傳達，同時要對文章中提出的是否應該保存“愛情隧道”發(fā)表意見。在對“愛情隧道”是否該保存發(fā)表意見時，要結(jié)合兩方面的意見進行全面分析，針對對人們的利弊情況，提出合理的意見。

【亮點說明】Nanjing government planned to cut the trees surrounding the “l(fā)ove tunnel” for the high number of visitors caused both safety concerns and pollutions, which gave rise to the objections of citizens.使用which引導的非限制性定語從句和動詞的現(xiàn)在分詞作定語；I am totally in favor of the citizen’s point of view that the fascinating love tunnel ought to be reserved.使用同位語從句；For one thing, it would be a great pity to put an end to the fairytale-like scenic spot, which brings peace and beauty to the visitors.使用非限制性定語從句和it would be a great pity句式；the authority could come up with a way to preserve the green corridor while also improving the safety of both people and trains.使用while加動詞的現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語。plan to，gave rise to ，put an end to ，ought to，come up with，make joint efforts to，serve as等動詞和句式的運用，使得文章的表達更加準確；both .. and…，in favor of，in a bid to，as long as，使得文章的表達更加生動。在表述多方面的意見時，F(xiàn)or one thing,For another thing，使得文章條理清晰。