Question

1．假定你是李華，每當(dāng)聽到"�；丶铱纯�"這首歌時，你都非常感動．向父母表達(dá)愛的方式有很多種，請你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，寫一篇演講稿號召同學(xué)們都要尊敬父母．
提示：1．經(jīng)常幫助父母做一些力所能及的家務(wù)活；
      2．經(jīng)常關(guān)心父母的生活和身體健康狀況；
      3．在父母生日時表達(dá)祝愿，讓他們知道我們的愛．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；   2．可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮以使行文連貫；
3．開頭和結(jié)尾部分已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
My dear fellows，
   Today I'd like to talk about love to our parents．
Many people are moved by the song Going home often when they hear it，including me．As a middle schoolstudent，I think we should respect/look up to our parents．
As far as I am concerned，there are many differentways to express love to our parents． First，we should often help our parents to do as much housework aswe can． Second，we have the duty to care forthe condition of their life and health． Besides，it's important to remember their birthdays，and expressing our wishes tothem is a good way of showing our deep love．
No matter what we do，remember showing respect toour parents is one of the Chinese traditional moral values．
Thank you!   Thank you!

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一篇演講稿，號召同學(xué)們都要尊敬父母．
寫作要點(diǎn)包括：1．經(jīng)常幫助父母做一些力所能及的家務(wù)活； 2．經(jīng)常關(guān)心父母的生活和身體健康狀況； 3．在父母生日時表達(dá)祝愿，讓他們知道我們的愛．
人稱以第一人稱為主．時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．
重要短語：talkabout （談?wù)摚�，look up to （尊敬），the ways to do sth （做某事的方法），As far as I am concerned （就某人所關(guān)注的而言），care for （關(guān)心），a good way of doing （做某事的好方法），show respect to…（對…尊敬）．
【高分句型】
1．…and expressing our wishes to them is a good way of showing our deep love．
這里是動名詞作主語，expressing our wishes to them作主語，is是謂語動詞．a(chǎn) good way of showing our deep love是表語．

2．No matter what we do，remember showing respect to our parents is one of the Chinese traditional moral values．
這里是No matter what引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句，remember showing respect to our parents is one of the Chinese traditional moral values．是主句．主句中又含賓語從句，從句中showing respect to our parents是主語，is是謂語動詞，one of the Chinese traditional moral values是表語．

解答 Mydear fellows，
         Today I'dlike to talk about love to/for our parents．Many peopleare moved by the song Going home often when they hear it，includingme． As a middle schoolstudent，I think we should respect/look up to our parents．（開頭）
As far as I am concerned，there are many differentways to express love to our parents． First，we should often help our parents to do as much housework aswe can．（經(jīng)常幫助父母做一些力所能及的家務(wù)活） Second，we have the duty to care forthe condition of their life and health．（經(jīng)常關(guān)心父母的生活和身體健康狀況） Besides，it's important to remember their birthdays，and expressing our wishes tothem is a good way of showing our deep love．【高分句型】（在父母生日時表達(dá)祝愿，讓他們知道我們的愛）
No matter what we do，remember showing respect to our parents is one of the Chinesetraditional moral values．【高分句型】（結(jié)尾）
Thank you!

點(diǎn)評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．