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9．Designed by our monitor，we has a story telling contest at the class meeting．All of us were very active，and everybody said that the most touching story was the one told by Zhang Hua，which won the first prize and made the meeting more meaningful So，here，I would like to share：
Not long ago，my friends encouraged me to try a 150-mile ride trip，an annual event that raised money for the poor children in the far-away mountains．
When I registered，the idea seemed excellent-to support a worthy cause while riding for a long distance．The ride began in the morning，and for the first few hours，I felt wonderful．But by the end of the day，I felt tired and bored．
Every excuse my brain pushed out seemed to travel right down to my legs．"I can't handle this，"and"everyone else is a better rider"were translated into shortness of breath．I was sure I'd have to quit．
Then I noticed that the lone rider in front of me looked different in some way．But she was too far away for me to tell why．So I pushed my self to catch up．There she was，riding alone slowly but steadily，with a slight and determined smile on her face-and she has only one leg．
My focus changed at that moment，F(xiàn)or a whole day I'd been doubting my body，but now I knew it was the will that would help me reach my goal．
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1）以約30個詞概括以上博文的主要內(nèi)容．
2）以約120個詞就"班會課"發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括：
①為什么張華的故事讓此次班會課令人難忘？
②舉例說明班會課對你學(xué)習(xí)和成長的影響；
③你怎樣看待班會課對學(xué)生的影響．
[寫作要求]
1）在作文中可以使用自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不能直接引用文中的內(nèi)容．
2）作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和學(xué)校的名稱．
[評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫．
At a class meeting，Zhang Hua won the 1^st prize in a story telling contest，which was so touching that the writer noted it down to share in his blog．
In his story，he experienced a volunteer ride trip to raise money for poor children．He had thought it was as easy as a cake，but then，tired and bored，he had a thousand reasons to give up when he noticed a one-legged lady before him．Seeing her determined smile，Zhang Hua reached his goal．What a great story and class meeting!It is inspiring us how to face difficulties in our life．
Once I was addicted to computer games，and I was so involved in it that it influenced my school work terribly．Then at a class meeting，my head teacher organized many activities to let us know the bad effects of being addictive．I was shocked and realized my danger!If it had not been because of that valuable class meeting，I would have been another person．
So，class meetings are our expectations，because they are an effective form of school moral education and the important way to convert the students'thought．Therefore，a good head teacher often attaches great importance to a weekly class meeting．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點．第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個人觀點．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱用第一和第三人稱． 重要短語：win the first prize（贏得第一名），in a contest（在比賽中），note sth down（寫下；記下），experience sth（鼓勵某人做某事），raise money（籌集資金），as easy as a cake （容易的事），give up（放棄），reached one's goal（實現(xiàn)某人的目標(biāo)），face difficulties（面對困難），be addicted to（盡最大努力做），be involved in（涉及，卷入），influence sth（影響某物），convert one's thought（改變某人的想法），attach great importance to sth （認為某物重要）．
【高分句型一】
1．At a class meeting，Zhang Hua won the 1^st prize in a story telling contest，which was so touching that the writer noted it down to share in his blog．
此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，關(guān)系代詞"which"在從句中作主語，指代前面整個主句的內(nèi)容．
【高分句型二】
2．Seeing her determined smile，Zhang Hua reached his goal．
此處是由現(xiàn)在分詞短語作伴隨狀語，主句為"Zhang Hua reached his goal"，主句的主語為"Zhang Hua"與動詞"see"構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．
【高分句型三】
3．If it had not been because of that valuable class meeting，I would have been another person．
此處是虛擬語氣在if條件狀語從句中的用法，是與過去的事實相反，從句結(jié)構(gòu)為"had+過去分詞"．
 主句結(jié)構(gòu)為"would/could/should/might+have done"．

解答 At a class meeting，Zhang Hua won the 1^st prize in a story telling contest，which was so touching that the writer noted it down to share in his blog．【高分句型一】（概括）
In his story，he experienced a volunteer ride trip to raise money for poor children．He had thought it was as easy as a cake，but then，tired and bored，he had a thousand reasons to give up when he noticed a one-legged lady before him．Seeing her determined smile，Zhang Hua reached his goal．【高分句型二】What a great story and class meeting!It is inspiring us how to face difficulties in our life．（為什么張華的故事讓此次班會課令人難忘）
             Once I was addicted to computer games，and I was so involved in it that it influenced my school work terribly．Then at a class meeting，my head teacher organized many activities to let us know the bad effects of being addictive．I was shocked and realized my danger!If it had not been because of that valuable class meeting，I would have been another person．【高分句型三】（舉例說明班會課對你學(xué)習(xí)和成長的影響）
             So，class meetings are our expectations，because they are an effective form of school moral education and the important way to convert the students'thought．Therefore，a good head teacher often attaches great importance to a weekly class meeting．（個人觀點：怎樣看待班會課對學(xué)生的影響）

點評 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應(yīng)概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．