Question

【題目】假如你叫李華，明年六月份將從淮南二中畢業(yè)，打算到美國加州大學上學。現(xiàn)在請根據(jù)下表的個人信息，用英語寫一封信，申請留學并索要申請材料。

姓名：李華	性別：男	出生年月：1998年5月
畢業(yè)學校：淮南二中	學業(yè)：各門功課優(yōu)秀
申請院校：美國加州大學	申請專業(yè)：計算機科學
興趣愛好：網(wǎng)絡(luò)和英語	電子郵箱：lihua91@sina.com

注意：1. 信件必須包括以上內(nèi)容，不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；

2. 詞數(shù)：120左右。開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：加州大學—The University of California

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in computer science in your university.

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Looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in computer science in your university.

First, please allow me to make a brief introduction of myself. I’m Li Hua, a boy born in May, 1998. I’m graduating from Huainan No. 2 Senior High School next June. I’m an all-A student with a keen interest in English and the Internet. I have a good command of spoken and written English, as well as rich experience in computer. I learn that The University of California is ranked among the most famous universities in the USA, and that’s the very reason why I’m now applying to further my university study in your Computer Science Department.

I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and send me the necessary application materials. By the way, my e-mail address is lihua91@sina.com.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇書信體裁的書面表達，要注意以下幾點：1、注意書信的格式，而且書信的語言要簡潔明了，開門見山提出寫信的目的。2、題目要求很詳細，注意不要遺漏表格中的信息，同時題文就是文章的寫作目的。3、寫信時語言要自然流暢，禮貌委婉，在內(nèi)容方面可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫，4、為了提高檔次還要注意句式的變換。

【亮點說明】本篇書面表達格式正確，作者第一句話就開門見山的提出了自己寫信的目的，文章全面涵蓋了所有要點，語言簡潔明了、自然流暢。運用了許多句式，如I’m writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance 是in the hope that的從句，I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information運用了I would appreciate it if ...的句式。詞匯的運用也恰當合理，如further my study中的further是運用為動詞，make a brief introduction簡單介紹，an all-A student三好學生，a keen interest in熱切的興趣，have a good command of 對...有良好的掌握，rich experience豐富的經(jīng)歷。同時，一些連接詞和短語如First，By the way，的使用也使文章更有條理性，銜接更加順暢。