Question

某海外學(xué)校舉辦英語訓(xùn)練營，開設(shè)了以下課程：園藝（gardening），烹飪（cooking），防身術(shù)（self-defense），護理（nursing ）。假設(shè)你是李華，寫封申請信，報名參加其中一門課程的學(xué)習(xí)。
內(nèi)容要點：1. 你感興趣的課程；2. 你期望從中學(xué)到什么；3.為什么想學(xué)這些內(nèi)容
Dear sir /madam,
                                                                                         
                                                                                         
                                                                                          
                                                                                         
                                                                                         
                                                                                         
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：Dear sir /madam,
I am very glad that your school will hold the English summer camp which contains many courses, such as gardening, cooking, self-defense, nursing and so on.
I want to register  to attend a course about gardening because I have liked  flowers, grasses etc since  I was a little child. I especially like playing in the garden where I can enjoy the beauty of nature. For one thing, I want to gain a bit more knowledge of gardening so that it can help me to major in the gardening after attending college. For another, I can realize the bitterness of the gardeners and treasure plants much more consequently. What‘s more, after graduation, I plan to devote my life to cultivate flowers and grasses to turn our country into a more beautiful state, attracting more foreigners to come to visit it.
Yours,
Li Hua

解析試題分析：本文要求根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容寫一封申請信，報名參加某海外學(xué)校英語夏令營開設(shè)的一門課程。書信的開始段應(yīng)該提出寫信的目的或者有關(guān)的事件，然后再圍繞要點展開行文。根據(jù)本文中的要點提示，范文內(nèi)容可以分為三個層次，1. 你感興趣的課程；2. 你期望從中學(xué)到什么；3.為什么想學(xué)這些內(nèi)容，而且寫作時要注意這三個要點順序不能顛倒。在時態(tài)方面應(yīng)該使用一般現(xiàn)在時來介紹自己的興趣愛好，因為是申請信，所以語言要簡潔明了，通俗易懂。此外，為了讓內(nèi)容更加充實，寫作時也要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象。在表述這些方面時盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，比如名詞性從句，定語從句，介詞短語，分詞短語等以增加文章亮點，提高文章檔次。
【亮點說明】本篇書面表達段落清晰，層次分明，語言通順流暢。在介紹要點時用到了表示層次關(guān)系和遞進關(guān)系的連接詞，比如for one thing , for another thing ，what is more等，這樣有效地使段落更加層次分明，而不會給人雜亂無章的感覺。在句式方面作者使用了定語從句where I can enjoy the beauty of nature..狀語從句since  I was a little child等多種句式，尤其是文章首句I am very glad that your school will hold the English summer camp which contains many courses, such as gardening, cooking, self-defense, nursing and so on.和文章末句What‘s more, after graduation, I plan to devote my life to cultivate flowers and grasses to turn our country into a more beautiful state, attracting more foreigners to come to visit it.這兩個長句的使用更加顯示了作者較高的語言水平，而且也成為了文章的亮點所在。
考點：考查提綱類作文。