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7．目前，就業(yè)形勢(shì)越來(lái)越嚴(yán)峻．就業(yè)壓力不僅是大學(xué)生無(wú)法回避的事實(shí)，也是高中生需要考慮的問(wèn)題．就此你校編輯部開(kāi)展了一次題為"就業(yè)危機(jī)對(duì)高中生的啟示"的英語(yǔ)征文活動(dòng)．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示，寫(xiě)一篇征文，闡明你的觀點(diǎn)．
1、努力學(xué)習(xí)，拓寬知識(shí)面；
2、發(fā)展才能，提高個(gè)人素質(zhì)；
3、加強(qiáng)合作精神，培養(yǎng)團(tuán)隊(duì)意識(shí)；
4、了解社會(huì)需求，做好人生規(guī)劃；
5、你的觀點(diǎn)…
注意：1、詞數(shù)120左右；
2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3、文章開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know，the employment situation is getting more serious now．Being high school students，what can we learn from it？
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．寫(xiě)作時(shí)首先要仔細(xì)審題，確定人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)，文體．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要全面，上下段要使用連接詞做到連貫．我們?cè)趯?xiě)作中應(yīng)當(dāng)遵循語(yǔ)言表述的經(jīng)濟(jì)原則，即用盡可能少的形式表達(dá)盡可能多的語(yǔ)義內(nèi)容，力求簡(jiǎn)潔精練．根據(jù)提綱的提示，寫(xiě)出所列要點(diǎn)，要全面．我們?cè)谟迷~上應(yīng)該仔細(xì)揣摩，準(zhǔn)確清晰地表達(dá)我們的思想，剔除冗詞贅語(yǔ)，使文章言簡(jiǎn)意賅．
重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)和句型：
more and more serious 越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重
to start with 首先
put one's heart into 全心投入
achieve one's goals 實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo)
cooperate with 合作
It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society．
句中it作形式主語(yǔ)，真正的主語(yǔ)是后面的that從句．
learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do，for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly．
句中l(wèi)earning to cooperate with others是動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)作主語(yǔ)；we must do修飾名詞thing，是一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句，省略了連詞that；for連接原因狀語(yǔ)從句．
we'd better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands．
句中meet后接what連接的賓語(yǔ)從句．
I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed．
think后接的賓語(yǔ)從句中，only加狀語(yǔ)提前，句子要部分倒裝．

解答 What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
     As we all know，the employment situation is getting more and more serious now．Being high school students，what can we learn from it？【提出問(wèn)題】
     To start with，we should put all our heart into study to broaden our knowledge in various fields．It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society．（高分句型一） Additionally，learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do，for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly．（高分句型二）Last but not least，as young generation in China，we'd better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands．（高分句型三）【具體做法】
     At present，I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed．（高分句型四） I'll spare no effort to study hard to accomplish my goal．【表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 書(shū)面表達(dá)題考查的是英語(yǔ)的應(yīng)用能力．寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意：要點(diǎn)的提煉要全；關(guān)鍵短語(yǔ)和句型要寫(xiě)對(duì)；過(guò)渡詞和過(guò)渡短語(yǔ)要自然，通順地道；最后還要注意人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài)使用要正確．