Question

【題目】假定你是李華，你校將組織在校師生本周六去游樂場（amusement park）游玩。請寫封郵件邀請外教Bryan同去，內(nèi)容包括：

1.出發(fā)時間、地點；

2.游玩的項目（劃船、騎車、喂魚等）；

3.表達(dá)期待。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Bryan,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Bryan,

I have good news for you. Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park this Saturday. It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along. We will set off at the school gate at eight a.m. this Saturday. We are requested to wait there in advance.

There are many interesting events in this trip. We can try some sporting events, such as rowing, cycling and riding roller coasters. Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices for us, which can make us get closer to nature.

I’m looking forward to your arrival and hope we can have fun together.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文, 寫一封邀請信。

第一步：

審題: 邀請信

人稱：第一、三人稱

時態(tài)： 一般現(xiàn)在時、一般將來時

結(jié)構(gòu)： 總分法，分三部分，第一部分說明寫信原因，第二部分說明活動安排，

第三部分表達(dá)期待。

要點：

1.說明寫信原因：邀請外教Bryan本周六去游樂場游玩

2．具體的活動安排

①出發(fā)時間、地點：本周六上午8點學(xué)校門口集合

②游玩項目安排：劃船、騎車、乘坐過山車、賞花、喂魚

3．期待Byran的到來 ，希望玩得高興

第二步：列提綱（重點詞匯、短語 ）

organize a trip；pleasure； invite sb. to；set off； request sb. to do …；in advance；interesting；sporting event；such as；appreciate；make sb.do …； get close to nature；arrival； have fun

第三步：連詞成句

(1)Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park.

(2)It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along.

(3)We will set off at the school gate at eight a.m. this Saturday.

(4)We are requested to wait there in advance.

(5)There are many interesting events in this trip. We can try some sporting events, such as rowing, cycling and riding roller coasters.

(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.

(7)It can make us get closer to nature.

根據(jù)提示和關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行遣詞造句,適當(dāng)?shù)剡\用句型，注意時態(tài)和主謂一致問題。

第四步：連句成篇(銜接詞、亮點詞匯)

用多種方式表達(dá)“學(xué)校將要組織去游樂場游玩”

(1)Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park.

→Our school will organize a trip to an amusement park.

→Our school is to organize a trip to an amusement park.

→Our school is scheduled to organize a trip to an amusement park.

用it 做形式主語表達(dá)下面的句子

(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.

→It will be good choices to appreciate some rare flowers in the winter and feed the fish in the pond.

用定語從句連接下面兩個句子

(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.

(7)It can make us get closer to nature.

→Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices,which can make us get closer to nature.

適當(dāng)?shù)剡\用高級詞匯、多變句式提升文章的檔次 ，增加文章的可讀性。