Question

11．假設你是李華，看到你們社區(qū)招募暑假照顧老人的廣告．你對此工作表示感興趣，希望得到機會去照顧老人．請結合下面的要點，給社區(qū)負責人寫一封求職信．
寫作要點：
1．你對這份工作的認識；
2．你有什么優(yōu)勢；
3．你的計劃．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．不要逐條翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開頭和結尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Sir，
I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board andI hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）Therefore，it is important for them to realize that they aren't ignored and there is someone who cares for them．
In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）I will go to visit them every day，chatting with them and doing some chores for them．Besides，because I have learned how to play the guitar，I will sing songs with them and play the guitar for them．
I'm looking forward to your reply in time．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設你是李華，看到你們社區(qū)招募暑假照顧老人的廣告．你對此工作表示感興趣，希望得到機會去照顧老人．請結合下面的要點，給社區(qū)負責人寫一封求職信．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：你對這份工作的認識；你有什么優(yōu)勢；你的計劃． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達physically and emotionally身體上和精神上；Therefore因此；care for 關心；In order to以便，為了；apply for申請；Besides另外；look forward to盼望；in time及時；
 I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board and I hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
  Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）
 In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir，
       I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board and I hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
       Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）Therefore，it is important for them to realize that they aren't ignored and there is someone who cares for them．
      In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）I will go to visit them every day，chatting with them and doing some chores for them．Besides，because I have learned how to play the guitar，I will sing songs with them and play the guitar for them．
      I am looking forward to your reply in time．
                                     
Yours sincerely
Li Hua
 

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．