Question

假設(shè)你是李華，David是你的美國(guó)網(wǎng)友。他對(duì)目前中國(guó)出現(xiàn)的霧霆天氣很關(guān)注，來(lái)信向你詢問(wèn)此事。請(qǐng)你給他寫(xiě)封回信。

主要內(nèi)容如下：

1.感謝他的關(guān)注。

2.簡(jiǎn)介霧霾 (smog) 天氣給人們的身體、生活帶來(lái)的危害。

3.談?wù)勀愕母邢搿?/p>

注意：可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫流暢；

開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)；

詞數(shù)：120左右

Dear David，

I'm glad to receive your letter.

Yours，

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear David,

I’m glad to receive your letter. I have learned from your letter that you are concerned about the smog which frequently appears in some areas of China. Thank you for your concern. I’m also very worried about such terrible weather because it has brought much inconvenience or rather harm to people’s health such as traffic jam, road accidents, bad coughs, throat hurts and ever lung cancers and so on.

As everybody knows, a good environment comes from good protection. So we should do what we can to make a difference. Try to drive less and choose air-friendly products. Only when everyone has the environmental awareness can we have cleaner air.

Hoping to hear from you soon and share your good ideas. 

【解析】

試題分析：本文的寫(xiě)作非常好些，對(duì)于環(huán)境保護(hù)的文章學(xué)生在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中經(jīng)常練，學(xué)生有話可寫(xiě)。對(duì)于本文首先對(duì)他的關(guān)注表示感謝Thank you for your concern.進(jìn)而介紹霧霾天氣對(duì)人健康的不好的影響，如交通堵塞，肺癌，交通事故等等such as traffic jam, road accidents, bad coughs, throat hurts and ever lung cancers and so on.來(lái)表達(dá)。最后，表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)和感想，我們應(yīng)該盡力的少開(kāi)車(chē)，選擇環(huán)保的產(chǎn)品，每個(gè)人都要意識(shí)到保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性try to drive less and choose air-friendly products.

everyone should have the environmental awareness.

考點(diǎn)：提綱類(lèi)寫(xiě)作

點(diǎn)評(píng)：書(shū)面表達(dá)是最能體現(xiàn)一個(gè)學(xué)生的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力和英語(yǔ)思維理解的題目，議論文的寫(xiě)作一般采用經(jīng)典的二段或三段式進(jìn)行行文，議論文是比較容易寫(xiě)的文體，提高作文無(wú)外乎平時(shí)多練習(xí)，在練習(xí)過(guò)程中，對(duì)于寫(xiě)錯(cuò)或是不知道表達(dá)的一定要多問(wèn)老師，同時(shí)還應(yīng)該多進(jìn)行閱讀，對(duì)閱讀過(guò)程中寫(xiě)的好的表達(dá)要進(jìn)行積累，并且學(xué)以致用，勤積累，多背誦，這樣才能作文才能穩(wěn)步的提升。