Question

13．假如你叫李華，你的朋友Jenny來信向你詢問如何保持健康．請你給他發(fā)一封E-mail提些建議．內(nèi)容要點如下：
1．注意合理飲食，多吃水果蔬菜；
2．保證充足睡眠，至少8小時；
3．堅持鍛煉身體，多參加體育運動．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當增添細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．郵件的開頭結尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Jenny，
How nice to hear from you!In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．I would like to give you some advice．
…．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達出來．本作文中給出的要點比較具體，故需要準確表達．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化．
【亮點說明】How nice to hear from you!感嘆句位于句子開頭；In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．疑問詞加動詞不定式運用巧妙；Since we grow very fast，we are in  need of nutritious food，such as fresh vegetables，fruits，fish，meat and so on．Since引導原因狀語從句，在此表示一種客觀事實；I think you'd better not eat food with much sugar and fat．賓語從句出現(xiàn)在句中；And you should get plenty of sleep，which is necessary for you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day．非限制性定語從句和動詞不定式完美結合；Only in this way can you keep fit．部分倒裝把文章推向了高潮；另外，However，In addition，的點綴，為文章增色添彩．

解答 Dear Jenny，
     How nice to hear from you!In your letter you asked me how to keep healthy．I would like to give you some advice．
     As we know，food is of great important to us teenagers．Since we grow very fast，we are in  need of nutritious food，such as fresh vegetables，fruits，fish，meat and so on．（高分句型一） However，I think you'd better not eat food with much sugar and fat．And you should get plenty of sleep，which is necessary for you to have at least eight hours of sleep every day．（高分句型二） In addition，you should take physical exercise regularly．It will be beneficial to your health．Only in this way can you keep fit．（高分句型三）
      Best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                             Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Li Hua

點評 本文屬于提綱類作文，動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題．平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果