Question

【題目】寫作內(nèi)容

假設(shè)你是李華，你上個星期天去市圖書館看書時發(fā)現(xiàn)以下問題，你寫信向館長Mr Li 反映：

1. 新書太少

2. 書架上的書比較混亂

3. 閱覽室的一盞燈壞了

4. 管理員工作時彼此閑聊，讀者無法安心看書

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100-120左右

2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫

3. 信的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)

Dear Mr Li,

Last Sunday, I went to do some reading in your library.__________________________________________

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So, for the sake of readers, I suggest that you change all these as soon as possible.

Yours,

LiHua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr.Li,

Last Sunday,I wen to do some reading in your library.Over the time I was there,I found something unpleasant.Therefore, I’d like to voice my opinions,which,I hope,would be of help for you to create a more comfortable place for readers.

First,there are few new books on the shelf,most of which are not popular today.Second,some books are not sorted in proper order,making it difficult for readers to find what they want quickly.Third,the assistant didn’t offer good service.Instead,they were chatting,which,made the raders not focus on what they read. Inaddition,they took no notice of the fact that a light wasn’t working. Leave this state of affairs to stay the same, and I am afraid there will be fewer and fewer readers.

So, for the sake of readers, I suggest that you change all these as soon as possible.

Yours,

LiHua

【解析】本篇書面表達屬于應(yīng)用文，要求寫一封信。

第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本篇為一封信；你上個星期天去市圖書館看書時發(fā)現(xiàn)一些問題，你寫信向館長Mr Li 反映，內(nèi)容包括新書太少、書架上的書比較混亂、閱覽室的一盞燈壞了、管理員工作時彼此閑聊，讀者無法安心看書；時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如：library （圖書館），something unpleasant（不愉快的事情），voice my opinions（提出我的觀點），shelf（書架），in proper order（良好的順序），assistant（管理員），chat（聊天）等。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

【亮點說明】

范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。作者在范文中使用了較多高級表達方式，如定語從句Therefore, I’d like to voice my poinions, which,I hope,would be of help for you to create a more comfortable place for readers.；First, there are few new books on the shelf, most of which are not popular today.；Instead, they were chatting, which, made the raders not focus on what they read.；同位語從句Inaddition, they took no notice of the fact that a light wasn’t working.全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，first，second，in addition等詞（組）的運用使得文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。