Question

【題目】 上個月，你和你班的一些同學對市空氣質(zhì)量進行了一項調(diào)查。調(diào)查的內(nèi)容如下：

寫作內(nèi)容：

空氣質(zhì)量：污染嚴重，特別是上下班的高峰期，情況更加糟糕。

原因分析：1. 私家車太多，近三年來以10%的速度增加；

2. 路面窄，車流速度慢，因為產(chǎn)生大量的尾氣；

3. 道路附近的工廠排放的廢氣也是空氣污染的原因之一。

呼 吁： 政府有責任控制私家車的數(shù)量；大力發(fā)展公共交通；市民踩單車上下班

注意：1．詞數(shù)100-120左右；

2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯： rush hours 上下班高峰期

Answer 1

【答案】

Last month some of my classmates and I carried out a survey about the air quality in our city, which shows that air pollution is rather serious, especially during rush hours. Too many private cars, which have been increasing by 10 % in the last three years should be one of the main reasons. Meanwhile, all the vehicles move very slowly on the narrow roads, causing large quantities of dirty air. Furthermore, industrial waste gas released from the nearby factories also contributes to the air pollution. Therefore, it is demanded that the government take up its responsibility to restrict the number of private cars and develop public transportation.

【解析】

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