Question

14．假定你是李華，最近收到了你的英國(guó)朋友Jacob的來(lái)信，得知他已經(jīng)考上了一所名牌大學(xué)．請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)信向他表示祝賀，并就你在大學(xué)專(zhuān)業(yè)選擇上遇到的困惑征求他的意見(jiàn)．信的內(nèi)容包括：
1向 Jacob 表示祝賀；
2談?wù)勀阍诖髮W(xué)專(zhuān)業(yè)選擇上的困惑；
3向?qū)Ψ秸髑笠庖?jiàn)和建議．
注意：1詞數(shù) 100 左右；
2可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Jacob，
Having heard from you，I'm writing to extend my warm congratulations to you，because you have been admitted to a famous University．（高分句型一）
As for me，I suffer from confusion when choosing my major．Initially，what I'm concerned about lies in whether the major will be suitable for me．Additionally，I prefer the one that is beneficial to my career prospects，instead of so-called popular major．（高分句型二）
To avoid making my decision blindly，I expect you to recommend some practical proposals to me，including analyzing the advantages and disadvantages of a certain profession．（高分句型三）I would appreciate it if you can do me a favor．
Looking forward to your early reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇寫(xiě)作屬于書(shū)信類(lèi)--求助信，要求考生掌握書(shū)信的格式，并有良好的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力和補(bǔ)充 細(xì)節(jié)能力．注意在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中明確地分段使文章具備合理的邏輯關(guān)系，包含所給要點(diǎn)信息，即表達(dá)謝意，面臨問(wèn)題，尋求幫助．如果想達(dá)到 21-25分一檔作文的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，必須豐富語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，盡可能使用高級(jí)詞匯．
【范文精講】
開(kāi)頭兩句寫(xiě)表達(dá)祝賀及原因，使用了 Having  heard  from  非謂語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)，because  引導(dǎo)的原因狀從兩種高級(jí)語(yǔ)法，
extend（表達(dá)），be admitted to（被錄�。﹥蓚�(gè)高級(jí)詞匯．
正文第一部分交代了面臨的問(wèn)題，重點(diǎn)在于補(bǔ)充的內(nèi)容．使用了 when choosing my major 狀從省略，what I'm concerned about lies in whether the major will be suitable for me．主語(yǔ)從句加表語(yǔ)從句，the one which is beneficial to my career prospects 定語(yǔ)從句三種高級(jí)語(yǔ)法，陳列事例時(shí)用 initially 和 additionally 替換了老套的 firstly，secondly．詞匯方 面使用了 suffer from，confusion，be concerned about，lie in，be suitable for，be beneficial to，prospect．
正文第二部分側(cè)重征求意見(jiàn)，使用了不定式作狀語(yǔ) to avoid，if 引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句以及 blindly，recommend，practical proposals 等高級(jí)詞匯．
結(jié)尾為常規(guī)類(lèi)書(shū)信企盼回復(fù)．

解答 Dear Jacob，
      Having heard from you，I'm writing to extend my warm congratulations to you，because you have been admitted to a famous University．（高分句型一）
      As for me，I suffer from confusion when choosing my major．Initially，what I'm concerned about lies in whether the major will be suitable for me．Additionally，I prefer the one that is beneficial to my career prospects，instead of so-called popular major．（高分句型二）
      To avoid making my decision blindly，I expect you to recommend some practical proposals to me，including analyzing the advantages and disadvantages of a certain profession．（高分句型三）I would appreciate it if you can do me a favor．
      Looking forward to your early reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．