Question

如果上周你和父母去了杭州游玩，請你以“A Visit to Hangzhou”為題，寫一篇短文介紹游玩的情況。要求語言通順，包括下列要點(diǎn)，適當(dāng)分段。

Time	上周  一大早動身	Place	杭州
Who	我和父母	How	乘兩個半小時(shí)的直達(dá)航班
What	1.到達(dá)后，先去西湖（the West Lake）,杭州以之出名。有著自然美景的地方，那里的景色一年四季都很美。我喜歡觀賞那里的音樂噴泉（the music fountain）,它看起來是美妙的。
	2.第二天，我們參觀了杭州樂園（Hangzhou Amusement Park）。在那里我們觀看了海豚表演和鳥的表演。我們拍了很多照片。
	3.第三天，我們?nèi)チ遂`隱寺（Lingyin Temple），然后我們?nèi)ベ徫�。我的媽媽最喜歡那一天，她為我們的親戚們和她的朋友們買了很多禮物。
	4.第四天，我們?nèi)チ艘患液ｕr館，品嘗了一些美味的當(dāng)?shù)氐氖澄铩?br />
Feelings	對此次旅游的感想和希望（自由發(fā)揮兩句）

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Answer 1

A Visit to Hangzhou
Last week, my parents and I got up earlier in order to visit Hangzhou. It took us two hours to get there by direct flight .
After we arived , first we went to the West Lake which made Hangzhou famous for. It was a place which had natural beauty. The view was very beautiful in a whole year. I enjoyed the music fountain,it sounded wonderful.
On the second day,we visted Hangzhou Amusement Park. We not only watched the show of dolphins and bired but also took many pictures.
On the third day, we went to Lingyin Temple. Then we went shopping. My mother liked that day best and bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
On the fourth day,we went to a seafood restaurant and tasted some local delicous food.
That was a very interesting traveling there.I will never forget it.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文作者主要去杭州旅行的經(jīng)歷，全文以一般過去時(shí)態(tài)為主。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，例如 got up，in order to，not only...but also,went shopping,a lot of 等短語，定語從句如which made Hangzhou famous for., which had natural beauty ；時(shí)間狀語從句After we arived ; 固定句型 It took us two hours to ... 文章層次清晰。文章整體內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。