Question

書面表達(dá)
學(xué)校英語(yǔ)園地將舉辦“校園節(jié)約，從我做起”的主題征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你針對(duì)校園浪費(fèi)情況，結(jié)合以下短語(yǔ)，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以班級(jí)名義寫一份倡議書。
What we often see in our school:
leave the taps (水龍頭) on after cleaning hands
leave the lights on when leaving
food left on the tables after meals
注意：
1.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
2.語(yǔ)言通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范。
3.詞數(shù)80左右，文章的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear schoolmates,
We are sorry to see so much waste in our school.                                
                                                                          
                                                                          
Class 1, Grade 9

Answer 1

Dear schoolmates,  
We are sorry to see so much waste in our school. We students often leave the taps on after cleaning our hands, and leave lights on when we leave. At the dining hall, we can see food left on the tables after meals. 
It’s time for us to change now. We should not waste any of our food. We should eat up all the food. We should not order the food more than we can eat while dining out, because many people in the world don’t have enough to eat. At the same time, I think we should save water and electricity. We should make good use of our school things. Let’s try to make a good habit and save things around us. Let’s do it from now on.
Class 1, Grade 9

試題分析：本文的寫作首先對(duì)題目所提出的三點(diǎn)浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行闡述leave the taps on after cleaning our hands, and leave lights on when we leave，see food left on the tables after meals，然后提出自己的倡議，如不要浪費(fèi)食物should not waste any of our food，不應(yīng)該點(diǎn)過(guò)多的食物should not order the food more than we can eat，節(jié)約用水電should save water and electricity，充分利用我們的學(xué)習(xí)用品good use of our school things.最后用排比句式一氣呵成來(lái)表達(dá)自己的倡議Let’s…, Let’s…。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文難度不大，寫自己的情況一般都有話可說(shuō)，寫作過(guò)程中寫作條理性要把握好，對(duì)于自己從不同方面的改變，寫的過(guò)程中通過(guò)變換句式和用詞上來(lái)提高語(yǔ)言的美度。在一件事情寫完后要用上表關(guān)系的連接詞，或平時(shí)積累的各類表遞進(jìn)、并列的連詞來(lái)是文章富于活力。在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中要多去背誦范文，對(duì)表達(dá)好的句子，短語(yǔ)要進(jìn)行積累，并默寫，考試前再集中看一下，這樣做到有備無(wú)患。