Question

假如你們班要舉行以“Caring about health”為題的主題班會(huì)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容提示，并結(jié)合自己的親身體會(huì)，寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的英語(yǔ)發(fā)言稿，談?wù)勀愕目捶�。開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
保持健康的意義；
自己以前身體很虛弱，經(jīng)常生病不能上學(xué)；
現(xiàn)在通過(guò)鍛煉，身體變得強(qiáng)壯有力；
保持健康的方法：多吃水果蔬菜；每天鍛煉一小時(shí)；早睡早起；勤洗手。
Caring about health
Boys and girls，
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Thank you

Answer 1

Caring about health
Boys and girls，
Health is the most important thing to everybody; wealth is the most valuable treasure to everybody. Without health,we can have nothing to talk about.
Looking back on my past, I was in poor health for about two years. My life was in the darkness. Sometimes I was too seriously ill to go to school. I could just play games for at most ten minutes. After that, I was told to exercise as much as possible in order to be in good health . It  really works. Now, I’m strong and powerful.
How to be healthy? There’s no secret. But first of all, you must eat more vegetables and do sports about at least one hour every day. At the same time ,you should go to bed early and sleep early. Last but not least, don’t forget to wash hands often, before eating, after going to the restroom …
Please remember my tips, then you will live a healthy life!
Thanks for your listening.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。形式上是一篇發(fā)言稿，但開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不是障礙。另外，本文所給材料比較明確，我們要做的就是用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主語(yǔ)是第一人稱，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意時(shí)態(tài)及主謂一致問(wèn)題，因?yàn)楸疚挠袑?duì)過(guò)去的回顧及與現(xiàn)在的對(duì)比。同時(shí)，寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系，是文章錦上添花也是必不可少的。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用了大量的連詞，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，開(kāi)篇一段三句話道出了健康的重要性，前兩句Health is the most important thing to everybody; wealth is the most valuable treasure to everybody.排比，言簡(jiǎn)有力。第二段分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)開(kāi)頭，新鮮有力，吸引讀者眼球，一些不常用詞或短語(yǔ)looking back on my past, at most, seriously, in order to, works,使文章增色不少。尾端也是娓娓道來(lái)，At the same time， Last but not least, 使所敘語(yǔ)言如小河流水，不急不緩，順理成章�？傊�，本文在語(yǔ)言表達(dá)上不失為一篇邏輯性和條理性都很強(qiáng)的一篇好文章.