Question

【題目】請根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容寫一篇文章介紹中國科學(xué)家錢學(xué)森。

1.1911年生于上海，1935年赴美留學(xué)，成績優(yōu)異，受到當時的著名科學(xué)家馮·卡門(Von Karman)的贊譽；

2.1938年在美國獲航空、數(shù)學(xué)博士學(xué)位；

3.1950年獲悉新中國成立的消息，克服了美國政府的百般阻撓，于1955年回到祖國；

4.1958年起長期擔任航空航天研究工作，為新中國的航天事業(yè)做出巨大的貢獻，被譽為“新中國航天之父”；5.2009年于北京去世。

獲博士學(xué)位： obtain one’s doctor’s degree

航天科技 : aerospace science and technology

為......做出巨大的貢獻: contribute a lot to...

中國的航天事業(yè):the cause of China’s areospace

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Answer 1

【答案】

Qian Xuesen, regarded as the father of China’s space program, was born in 1911 in Shanghai.

In 1935, Qian went to America for further study and was highly thought of by Von Karman because of his great achievements. In 1938, he obtained his doctor’s degree in aerospace science and mathematics in the US. In 1950, he heard New China had been founded and succeeded in coming back to his homeland in 1955 though the American government tried to stop him. Since 1958 he had been devoted to aerospace science and technology and contributed a lot to the cause of China’s aerospace and in 2009, he passed away in Beijing.

Because of the love for his country and the great achievements, he has received the respect and admiration from his people.

【解析】

試題分析：對于介紹人生平的文章，注意條理要清晰，可以用表示時間的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，如in 1911，two years later,after three years,when he was 50 years old等等。注意變換時間敘述的形式，不要一直用在某某年份。同時注意文中所給的信息，不可遺漏，可以多進行一些補充，盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。時態(tài)：用一般現(xiàn)在時。結(jié)構(gòu)上：可采取總分總模式。盡量使用一些高級句型和詞匯提升作文檔次�！玖咙c說明】1、文章脈絡(luò)結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，整體框架嚴密。形式完整，采用總分總形式。首段介紹錢的出生、第二段記敘生平經(jīng)歷、第三段升華總結(jié)，使文章更有條理。2、運用較多高級短語，避免文章陷入平庸的分數(shù)段，如：was highly thought of （而不是praiseed）、great achievements（而不是success）、obtained his doctor’s degree(obtain而不是get) 、succeeded in coming back、contributed a lot to（而不是devoted to） 、received the respect and admiration from（用admiration而不是love），使文章更加生動，所以考生要在平時注重積累，爭取能把高級詞匯或者短語運用到自己的文章中去。3、變換句型，注重時態(tài)。如首段的定語從句Qian Xuesen, regarded as the father of China’s space program, was born in 1911 in Shanghai. ，給讀者耳目一新的感受，體現(xiàn)了作者高超的遣詞造句能力，使讀者有讀下去的興趣。全篇用一般過去時，同時在個別句子中運用過去完成時，如Since 1958 he had been devoted to aerospace science使文章更有水平。