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【題目】假設(shè)你校將為學(xué)生開設(shè)以下課程：野外拓展 (Outward bound training)；口才訓(xùn)練 (Eloquence training)；禮儀培訓(xùn) (Etiquette training)；職業(yè)培訓(xùn) (Vocational training)。請根據(jù)你的自身特點和需求選擇其中的一個課程，并簡要談?wù)勀氵x擇這個課程的理由。

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I am so excited to learn that there will be four new training courses available for students this semester. Concerning Outward bound, Eloquence, Etiquette and Vocation, I won’t hesitate to choose Outward bound training. Not only is it because I am active and lively, but also that it can effectively improve physical ability, perseverance, wisdom, communication and other aspects of the quality.

First and foremost, students’ psychological quality education is more and more highly valued by the community, because this issue has become a prominent factor affecting health and stability of talent. Most projects of Outward Bound are designed to improve the quality of people’s psychology, to improve self-control ability of students to continually overcome the psychological fear, to challenge themselves, overcome themselves and shape the good will quality of calm, resolute, indomitable.

In addition, Outward Bound can cultivate students’ sense of team work. In modern society, the era of relying on one person to conquer the world has passed. Success requires cooperation, needs every member of the team in a positive understanding of each other. Outward Bound has a lot of teamwork needed to complete the project, such as “survival”, “canned shoes”. A person’s power is limited, but when integrated into the team, if everyone can play their strengths, them the whole team can complete the task that individual can't complete.

Obviously, Outward Bound can achieve educational goals of psychological and social adaptation, which , for the long run, pays off and benefits us for a life-long term.

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試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱式作文。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。3、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。 4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如Not only is it because I am active and lively, but also that it can effectively improve physical ability, perseverance, wisdom, communication and other aspects of the quality用了倒裝和強調(diào)句。if everyone can play their strengths, them the whole team can complete the task that individual can't complete.這句話是狀語從句。此外，文章還使用了大量短語 hesitate to do, be designed to do 等。First and foremost, in addition的使用使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，也使語言更加連貫。