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【題目】最近，我們學(xué)校新校規(guī)規(guī)定禁止學(xué)生在校園內(nèi)使用手機(jī)，這引起了家長和同學(xué)們的熱烈討論。有人支持這個校規(guī)，認(rèn)為使用手機(jī)會使學(xué)生分心，過度使用手機(jī)還會影響學(xué)生的健康。也有人反對這個校規(guī)，他們認(rèn)為手機(jī)不僅便于家長和學(xué)生聯(lián)系，而且還有其他的功能。

請寫一篇短文反映出這些信息，并闡明自己的觀點(diǎn)或態(tài)度。可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容使全文通順流暢，字?jǐn)?shù)120左右。（開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。）

Recently, our school has drawn up a new rule that mobiles shall not be used at school, which provokes a heated discussion.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Recently, Our school has drawn up a new rule that mobiles shall not be used at school, which provokes a heated discussion.

Some parents are happy with this rule. They believe multifunctional phones do distract students’ attention, which is supposed to be paid to studies. Besides, there is widespread concern that overuse of mobiles may cause some health problems like short sightedness, or hearing loss resulting from loud music from earphones.

However, some people find the rule hard to accept. As an important means of communication, mobiles bring great convenience to the contact between students and their parents. What’s more, mobiles can be very helpful tools, with which students can search for useful information they need.

Personally, it is not whether to ban mobiles at school that matters but how to use them. What the school should do is to guide students to be the masters of mobiles rather than the slaves.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)屬于議論文，根據(jù)提示信息來闡明自己對校園內(nèi)使用手機(jī)的觀點(diǎn)。寫作時注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象，行文要有邏輯和適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞。 3、注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)，有恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞使得文章條理清晰。比如however,besides,what’s more等連接詞的使用讓文章看起來思路清楚，同時運(yùn)用了許多高級詞匯，如multifunctional表示多功能的，sightedness表示近視。句型多樣，如which is supposed to be paid to studies是非限制性定語從句，還有it is not whether to ban mobiles at school that matters but how to use them.運(yùn)用了not...but...句型。