Question

假定你是李華，正在一所英國學校學習暑期課程，遇到一些困難，希望得到學校輔導中心(Learning Center)的幫助。根據(jù)學校規(guī)定，你需書面預約，請按下列要點寫一封信：
1. 本人簡介；
2. 求助內容；
3. 約定時間；
4. 你的聯(lián)系方式 （Email: lihua@1236.com; Phone: 12345678
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3. 開頭和結束語已為你寫好。
Dear Sir/Madam,
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Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir/Madam,
I’m Li Hua, a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university. I’m writing to ask for help. I came here last month and found my courses interesting. But I have some difficulties with notetaking and I have no idea of how to use the library. I was told the Learning Center provides help for students and I’m anxious to get help from you. I have no class on Tuesday mornings and Friday afternoons. Please let me know which day is OK with you. You may email or phone me. Here are my email address and phone number: lihua@1236. com; 12345678.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours                                                            Li Hua

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料非常簡單，學生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必修認真審題，首先要注意文章的時態(tài)，要求是對學生暑假課程學習中遇到的困難，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時。要求讓你學習輔導中心寫一封email，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的得分檔次。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如ask for help，have no idea of等，還運用了have difficulties with固定句型和how to use the library非謂語動詞結構等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：but，and 等等。