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12．假設(shè)你是李華．現(xiàn)在，很多同學(xué)都因自己近視而苦惱，據(jù)此，寫一篇廣播稿，詞數(shù)100個左右．要點如下：
　1．介紹一下你們班同學(xué)的情況；
　2．分析一下造成你們班這種情況的原因；
　3．提些保護眼睛的建議．
注意：開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear teachers and schoolmates，
May I have your attention，please？
                                                                                
That's all．Thank you!

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息現(xiàn)在，很多同學(xué)都因自己近視而苦惱，據(jù)此，寫一篇廣播稿，詞數(shù)100個左右，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：介紹一下你們班同學(xué)的情況；分析一下造成你們班這種情況的原因；提些保護眼睛的建議． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：deal with應(yīng)對，處理；In my opinion以我的觀點來看；because of由于；However然而；take measures to 采取措施做某事；Last but not least最后，同樣最重要；
Now，it astonishes me to see an increasing number of students who wear glasses and some even in high degree，which worries themselves a lot．（高分句型一）
Second，because of the high pressure of study，they often study for too long without any break，which wears their eyes out．（高分句型二）
Whenever we are free，we can do some exercises to restore our eyes quickly．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear teachers and schoolmates，
　   May I have your attention，please？My topic today deals with the problem of short-sightedness in students．
 　  Now，it astonishes me to see an increasing number of students who wear glasses and some even in high degree，which worries themselves a lot．（高分句型一）In my opinion，there are three main reasons．First，their ways of using eyes are not healthy．Second，because of the high pressure of study，they often study for too long without any break，which wears their eyes out．（高分句型二）Third，some spend too much time before televisions or computers，which accelerates their symptoms．
　   However，we can take measures to protect our eyesight．Parents and teachers should look out for students who may have eyesight problems．When reading，make sure we are in bright places and let our eyes rest every hour．Whenever we are free，we can do some exercises to restore our eyes quickly．（高分句型三）Last but not least，if necessary，we should have our eyes checked regularly．
　　That's all．Thank you!

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．