Question

12．一家英語報社向中學(xué)生征文，主題是尋找身邊的榜樣．請根據(jù)下列要求完成短文．
1．身邊的榜樣是誰；
2．主要事跡/表現(xiàn)．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右：
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
                                                              

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類作文，根據(jù)題目要求可知要用第一人稱來敘述，時態(tài)應(yīng)該以一般過去時態(tài)（論述過去發(fā)生的事）和一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)（表示他的影響）為主．文章主要分成三部分：一 點題，說明要敘述的對象；二 敘述他的主要事跡以及影響；三 表示感謝．
高分句型：
1．Not only my teachers and classmates，but also（和前面的not only 表示"不但…而且"） my mother always scold that（引導(dǎo)賓語從句） how stupid I was．
不但老師和同學(xué)，而且我的媽媽都指責我太愚蠢了．
2．Because of his patient and good teaching（原因狀語），I（主語） found （謂語）maths was so interesting（賓語從句） and became（和found并列的謂語動詞） good at it day by day．
由于他的耐心教導(dǎo)，我發(fā)現(xiàn)數(shù)學(xué)是如此有趣，漸漸地擅長數(shù)學(xué)了．

解答 When comes to role model，people always think about some pop stars or heros，but my role model is my grandpa（點題）．
       Grandpa is a simple maths teacher．when I was a child，I'm thin and weak in sports and maths．Not only my teachers and classmates，but also my mother always scold that how stupid I was（高分句型一）．But grandpa always encouraged me that"don't give up，just try again"．Becides，he also helped me with maths．Because of his patient and good teaching，I found maths was so interesting and became good at it day by day（高分句型二）．What's more，I became to know that very often a disappointment some times can becomes a turning point for a wonderful experience to along．（主要事跡）
Now I want to express to grandpa that how greatful I am，and his words"don't give up，just try again"are also deeply in my heart．（表達感謝）

點評 這是篇提綱式的說明文，要求考生以根據(jù)要點介紹一個身邊自己學(xué)習的榜樣．在寫作的時候，根據(jù)要點的內(nèi)容進行寫作．在寫作時要注意各個內(nèi)容要點的不同而使用不同的時態(tài)．首先，身邊的榜樣，應(yīng)該使用一般現(xiàn)在時，而他/她具體做的事情與事跡，要以一般過去時為主．除此以外，要注意寫作過程中注意使用平時學(xué)到的短語和句型，注意行文的連貫和邏輯性．