Question

假如你是高二某班的一名班長。你所在班級的 關(guān)系總體上很好，師生如同朋友、同學(xué)如同兄弟姐妹；但是，也存在一些問題，如有時因為學(xué)習(xí)壓力大，有些同學(xué)容易發(fā)火導(dǎo)致和其他同學(xué)吵架，有時不聽老師或家長的勸告等。針對這個情況，你在一次班會上首先介紹了當(dāng)前的實際情況：好的方面和不夠好的方面；然后向同學(xué)們提出了一些建議（至少兩條）。

注意：1. 文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；

2. 詞數(shù)：120左右。

Dear classmates,

Today, I would like to say something about the relationship between students in our class. Generally speaking, the relationship between students is good.

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Answer 1

Dear classmates,

Today, I would like to say something about the relationship between students in our class. Generally speaking,，the relationship between students is good. Teachers and students are like friends. Classmates get on well like sisters and brothers. However, there exist some problems; some students are easy to get angry because of too much study stress. What’s worse, they sometimes quarrel with others, and even don’t listen to their parents’ and teachers’ advice, which is very disappointing.

In my opinion, we, as middle school students, should make every effort to improve this situation. First we should respect our teachers and parents as well as our classmates. Second, I think that having a chat with our friends is a good way to raise our spirits. Many times, problems can be solved if people understand each other better. Finally, we can relax after a day’s work by listening to some light music or by taking some exercise.

【解析】

試題分析：本試題沒有給定具體題目，但是按照題目要求，是要作為班長，來對大家進行勸導(dǎo)。但是題目提到了，首先要對現(xiàn)狀進行介紹，所以寫作時候要注意不能落下。還要按照題目要求就班上具體好的方面和不好的方面來寫。亮點分析：本文抓住了中心和重點，首先提到了班級的現(xiàn)狀，并且在后面提到了班級的一些好的方面和不好的方面，。運用了較多的短語如in my opinion，what’s worse，generally speaking,等來連接顯示了作者扎實的基本功。最后的first，second，finally使得本文更具有邏輯性。本文還運用了插入語，如In my opinion, we, as middle school students, should make every effort to improve this situation.和定語從句如teachers’ advice, which is very disappointing. 來為本文增色。本文作者通條理清晰，觀點明確，運用較多的詞匯，體現(xiàn)了作者深厚的寫作功底。問題說明：本文雖然運用的特色詞匯較多，但是句式過于單一，所以建議能夠添加一些復(fù)合句，還能加一些強調(diào)句或者倒裝句來增色例如Only if we express our feelings,we will be more comfortable and it will be more easy for us to get good grades.It is ourselves that should be blame rather than our pressure 。

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