Question

閱讀下面短文，然后按照要求寫(xiě)一篇150詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文。

Sarah Hughes won the gold medal in women’s figure skating at the 2002 Winter Olympics. A graduate of Yale University, she is writing her first book. She owes her success to her parents' support.

“I started skating when I was 3 years old. Competing in the Olympic Games had been my dream from the beginning. When I was 12 years old, my mother was hospitalized with breast cancer. I was on the way to making my first national team. Seeing my excitement at each stage gave her strength through her illness. On days when she was too weak to walk, she would think, ‘I have to make it through. I have to be there for my kids.’ My mom was able to leave the hospital to come to Philadelphia from New York to watch me win the Junior Ladies title. That day I was skating for more than just the judges. My parents' support made all the difference when I performed on the skating stage. When I won the Olympic medal, I was able to share more than just my skating experience with the people who were with me all along. I was raised in a stable, supportive environment."

[寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容]

1. 用約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。

2．以約120個(gè)詞就＂父母的支持＂這一話(huà)題談?wù)勀愕目捶�，�?nèi)容包括:

(1)父母的支持對(duì)我們健康成長(zhǎng)的重要性；

(2)講述生活中父母對(duì)你的一次重要支持；

(3)感謝父母的支持。

[寫(xiě)作要求]

1. 作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱(chēng)。

[評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]

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Answer 1

Sarah shows great gratitude to her parents because her parents provided her with great support in her skating career. She holds the view that it was her parents’ support that made her succeed.

As for me, I totally agree with Sarah. There is no doubt that parents’ support plays an important part in our daily life. They spare no effort to make us live a better life and their support gives us the courage to face all the difficulties in our life and studies.

Sarah’s experience reminds me of something unforgettable that my parents did for me many years ago. When I was in primary school, I was quite shy and had great difficulty communicating with my classmates. Therefore, I often felt lonely and had no interest in school life. After my parents learnt about this they tried their best to encourage me to talk to my classmates and teachers. It was with their help and support that I eventually overcame my shyness and built up confidence. Now, I really appreciate their support and I would like to say thanks to them from my bottom of heart.

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求使用約30個(gè)詞來(lái)概括短文的主要內(nèi)容，然后以120個(gè)詞就“父母的支持”談?wù)勛约旱目捶�。�?xiě)作要點(diǎn)包括：父母的支持對(duì)健康成長(zhǎng)的重要性；講述生活中父母對(duì)的一次重要支持；感謝父母的支持。寫(xiě)作中不能出現(xiàn)拼寫(xiě)和標(biāo)點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤，多使用一些高級(jí)詞匯和重點(diǎn)語(yǔ)法。

亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：范文注意使用As for me, Therefore, Now等來(lái)銜接上下文；

范文使用了一些重點(diǎn)語(yǔ)法知識(shí)：原因狀語(yǔ)從句because her parents provided her with great support；同位語(yǔ)從句that it was her parents’ support that made her succeed；強(qiáng)調(diào)句型it was her parents’ support that made her succeed，It was with their help and support that I eventually overcame my shyness；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句When I was in primary school，After my parents learnt about this；固定句型There is no doubt that parents’ support plays an important part in our daily life.；定語(yǔ)從句that my parents did for me many years ago等，語(yǔ)法知識(shí)運(yùn)用嫻熟；

范文使用了較多的固定短語(yǔ)和搭配：shows great gratitude to；agree with；spare no effort to do；live a better life；reminds me of；built up；had great difficulty communicating with my classmates；had no interest in；tried their best to do；encourage me to do；would like to do；from my bottom of heart等，使作文顯得充實(shí)，有說(shuō)服力；

范文還使用了一些高級(jí)詞匯：gratitude, unforgettable, appreciate等，顯示了較高的寫(xiě)作水平。

考點(diǎn)：材料類(lèi)作文