Question

假設(shè)你是李華，下面是你校對(duì)中學(xué)生近視情況的調(diào)查，請(qǐng)你寫一篇文章刊登在校報(bào)上，呼吁大家愛護(hù)眼睛，保護(hù)視力．

1. 初一學(xué)生的近視率為24％，到了初三上升到38%左右；

2. 高中學(xué)生近視率達(dá)到47.5%左右；

3. 導(dǎo)致中學(xué)生近視的原因：學(xué)習(xí)任務(wù)過重；用眼過度；長(zhǎng)時(shí)間看電腦；不良的閱讀習(xí)慣等；

4.怎樣預(yù)防探視：注意用眼衛(wèi)生．．．

注意：１)詞數(shù)120詞左右；

２）題目自擬

參考詞匯：近視 near-sighted

Answer 1

Recently, I have made a survey that how many students have become shortsighted in our school. The result is so astonished that I cannot believe it.

At present, about 24% of the students from the first grade junior middle school are shortsighted. The rate of shortsighted reaches 38% in the third grade. In the high school, the figures are more terrible, reaching about 47.5%. Here are some main causes. Some students may not have enough sleep；Some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest； Some students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time. In order to have good eyesight, we should do eye exercises every day. We can also try to do more sports in our spare time. We should have the good habit of using our eyes.

I think all of us should realize the importance of protecting eyes and try our best to protect them.

【解析】

試題分析：對(duì)于談社會(huì)現(xiàn)象的文章，注意條理要清晰。首先要描述這一現(xiàn)象，并對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的因?yàn)檫M(jìn)行說明，最后還要提出解決辦法。注意文中所給的信息，不可遺漏，可以多進(jìn)行一些補(bǔ)充，盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。時(shí)態(tài)：用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。結(jié)構(gòu)上：可采取總分總模式。使用一些高級(jí)句型和詞匯提升作文檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】 文章條理清晰，首先闡述了社會(huì)現(xiàn)象，再由該現(xiàn)象談到其產(chǎn)生的原因，最后提出了解決辦法，思路清晰。開頭一句Recently, I have made a survey that how many students have become shortsighted in our school 使用that引導(dǎo)的同位語從句，接著第二句使用so…that句型，加強(qiáng)語氣說明此現(xiàn)象的驚人；對(duì)于三個(gè)數(shù)字的說明分別采用三種不同的表達(dá)：about 24% of the students、The rate of shortsighted reaches 38%、the figures are more terrible, reaching about 47.5%.，不同的句式和結(jié)構(gòu)使文章更加豐富多彩，體現(xiàn)了寫作者的水平。分析原因時(shí)，使用Some students may not have enough sleep；Some students spend too much time reading or doing their homework without a rest； Some students even like to watch TV or use computers for a long time.的排比句，是文章更有氣勢(shì)，更優(yōu)美；在表示花時(shí)間時(shí)，分別使用了兩個(gè)不同的表達(dá)：spend too much time reading、use computers for a long time。在整篇文章中還是用了made a survey：做調(diào)查、do eye exercises ：做眼保健操、have the good habit of：養(yǎng)成良好的習(xí)慣、spare time：空余時(shí)光、realize the importance of：意識(shí)到、、、的重要性等重要短語。在文章結(jié)尾處，呼吁大家要愛護(hù)自己的眼睛。整篇文章簡(jiǎn)潔而又清晰，適合發(fā)表在報(bào)刊上供大家閱讀�？偨Y(jié)：對(duì)于分析社會(huì)現(xiàn)象類的作文，我們要從三點(diǎn)出發(fā)：描述社會(huì)現(xiàn)象、解釋產(chǎn)生原因、提出解決辦法。

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