Question

你的筆友Peter想了解四川汶川的地震情況，請根據(jù)以下提示的信息，用英語給Peter發(fā)一封e-mail,，簡單描述一下5.12地震。

要點如下：

1. 地震于2008年5月12日下午發(fā)生在四川汶川；

2. 當時人們正在上班、學生正在上課；

3. 大量的房屋、學校、建筑物被毀，水電供應(yīng)中斷；

4. 有70,000多人喪生，還有很多受傷者和無家可歸者；

5. 是歷史上最嚴重的地震之一；

6. 震后，全國各地都在積極援建地震災區(qū)，三年來，災區(qū)發(fā)生了很大變化。

要求：

1. 短文必須包括要點中的所有內(nèi)容；

2. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容連貫；

3. 詞匯：災區(qū)（the disaster-hit areas）

4. 詞數(shù)：120左右。

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Answer 1

On May 12, 2008, a big earthquake hit Wenchuan, a county in Sichuan Province. It happened in the afternoon when most people were at work and all the students were in class. When the earthquake happened, it seemed as if the world was at an end. Houses and tall buildings fell down. Water and electricity were cut off. In a few seconds the whole towns and villages were almost destroyed and lay in ruins. The number of people who were killed reached more than 70,000. Besides, a large number of people were injured and lost their homes. It was one of the biggest earthquakes in history.

Luckily, after the earthquake people from all over the country tried their best to help rebuild the disaster-hit areas. Over the past 6 years, great changes have taken place there. It has taken on a new look.

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求給筆友Peter寫一封郵件，向他介紹汶川地震的情況。寫作要點包括：地震發(fā)生的時間；地震發(fā)生時的情況；災后重建工作等方面；詞數(shù)在120詞左右；必須包含所有要點，可以適當增加細節(jié)，使作文變得連貫；不要出現(xiàn)標點和拼寫錯誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀。

亮點說明：

范文涵蓋了所有要點，進行了適當?shù)耐卣�，并注意語句之間的連貫性；范文還使用了定語從句、時間狀語從句等語法知識，具備較強的語言運用能力。

語法方面：定語從句①when most people were at work，②who were killed；時間狀語從句When the earthquake happened；表語從句as if the world was at an end等，顯示了較強的語法功底，也使作文的句式變得多樣；

短語和搭配方面：范文使用了fall down, cut off, lie in ruins, more than, from all over the country, try one’s best to do, take place, taken on等，使作文的內(nèi)容變得充實；

篇章結(jié)構(gòu)方面：范文注意使用besides, luckily, over the past 6 years等銜接句子和段落，使作文銜接緊密、語意連貫。

考點：書信類作文