Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

一家英語(yǔ)報(bào)社向中學(xué)生征文，主題是”十年后的我”。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)和你的暢想

完成短文。

1、 家庭

2、 工作

3、 業(yè)余生活

注意：1、詞數(shù)100左右;

2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫;

3. 開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好

I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.

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Answer 1

【答案】

one Possible Version

I often imagine what my life will be like in the future. I think my life will be very different in ten years. I will be twenty-eight years old by then. I will have my own family. Probably with a lovely child. I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer. I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues, I will do a good job in whatever I do. In my free time, I will continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball games. On my holidays, I will travel around the world. In a word, my life will be much richer and more colorful.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇記敘文，主題是“十年后的我”。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意從家庭、工作和業(yè)余生活三方面要點(diǎn)著手，因?yàn)樘崾拘畔⑤^少，所以要充分發(fā)揮想象，增加適當(dāng)?shù)募?xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，充實(shí)內(nèi)容。比如可以聯(lián)想到的內(nèi)容有健身，度假，聚會(huì)等等。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)盡量使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，插入語(yǔ)以使文章層次分明，使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)和高級(jí)詞匯亮點(diǎn)來(lái)提高文章的檔次，如定語(yǔ)從句，賓語(yǔ)從句和狀語(yǔ)從句等。此外，因?yàn)槭菚诚胛磥?lái)，所以要用一般將來(lái)時(shí)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文短小精悍，要點(diǎn)全面，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練，時(shí)態(tài)人稱準(zhǔn)確，很好的完成了寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。在文章開(kāi)頭作者緊扣題目，提出自己對(duì)未來(lái)的暢想，然后從生活，工作，家庭三個(gè)方面描述了自己十年后的生活。在文中作者用到了短語(yǔ)In my free time , In a word , such as等介詞短語(yǔ)，避免了文章句式的單一。此外，還用到了賓語(yǔ)從句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等，這些都給樸素的語(yǔ)言帶來(lái)了亮點(diǎn)。