Question

【題目】Everyone has an experience they would rather forget. Some are embarrassing, some are moving, and some teach us a lesson. Here is a story of mine.

Last Sunday I went fishing. After setting up my fishing rod with bait, I sat down on the bank of the lake. But two hours later, I didn’t catch any fish. I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff, preparing to go back home.

Just then, I saw an old man sitting near me. To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why. “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked. “About four hours,” he answered. “Four hours?” I couldn’t believe my ears. “Yes. It’s very important to be patient,” the old man said. “Don’t consider fishing a tiring sport. Just enjoy it.” Suddenly, I understood what he said. I must learn to be patient. Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently. I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didn’t move and waited for the right moment to reel it in. At last, I caught it. This made me very happy. In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish.

On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank. I gradually realized that the secret of success was patience.

[寫作內(nèi)容]

1、以約30個詞概括短文的要點；

2、然后以約120個詞寫一篇記敘文，描寫你認識到耐心的重要性的一次經(jīng)歷，并包括如下的要點：

1）敘述你認識到耐心的重要性的一次真實或虛構的經(jīng)歷；

2）你是如何認識到耐心的重要性的；

3）耐心對你的生活、學習有什么影響。

[寫作要求]

1、在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

（請將作文寫在答題卷作文區(qū)。）

Answer 1

【答案】

Patience is the secret of success

This passage is mainly about the writer’s experience of fishing and was taught an unforgettable lesson by an old man for being impatient. He knew the importance of patience and finally got some fish.

It occurs to me that a similar story of mine happened 3 years ago and taught me a lesson. One day, I waited for the bus at the stop for 30 minutes, no bus came. I couldn’t wait any longer and decided to walk to school. But no sooner had I left than the bus arrived. I thought if I had waited for one more minute, I would have caught it. If I wanted to take the next bus, I would have to wait for another 30 minutes.

Only then did I realize the importance of patience. Being impatient will waste all the efforts that we have made.

In my opinion, patience plays an important part in our study and work. With it we can achieve greater success. Now, whenever I am to lose my patience, I’ll think of the experience of waiting for a bus.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達屬于閱讀任務型寫作，根據(jù)所給的閱讀材料可以看出是有關作者難忘的一件事，就是釣魚要有耐心。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀所給材料，弄清材料所提供的信息，告訴我們什么道理。2、所給的寫作內(nèi)容就是文章的總體框架，要在寫作內(nèi)容的范圍內(nèi)進行構思和想象。3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第一人稱。 4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結構。比如It occurs to me that…用it作形式主語；But no sooner had I left than the bus arrived.和Only then did I realize the importance of patience.都用了倒裝句；I thought if I had waited for one more minute, I would have caught it.用了if虛擬條件句；whenever I am to lose my patience,用了讓步狀語從句。此外，文章還使用了大量短語plays an important part in；occurs to me等。這些高級句式和短語詞匯的使用使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，也使語言更加連貫。