Question

【題目】 隨著中國經(jīng)濟(jì)的發(fā)展，出國旅游成為一種潮流，但游客中也出現(xiàn)了許多有損國人形象的不和諧現(xiàn)象。假如你是李華，一名導(dǎo)游。為了提升你所帶旅游團(tuán)成員的素質(zhì)，請給團(tuán)員寫一封信，向他們簡要描述一些不和諧現(xiàn)象，并在言行、守法、尊重風(fēng)俗、安全等方面提出幾點文明出游的建議。

要求：① 100詞左右；

② 可適當(dāng)增加內(nèi)容，使行文連貫流暢。

Dear Sir or Madam,

A growing number of people prefer to spend their holidays abroad. _____________________

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Sir or Madam,

A growing number of people prefer to spend their holidays abroad. However, what some of us say and do on the journey annoys the local residents. For example, some laugh at others’ appearance only because they look different. So I am writing to remind you of some advice on our behavior.

Above all, it’s important that we should mind our behavior when using some public transport services, especially on a flight or a train. As everyone know, it’s natural that we should obey the law of the destination. Besides, whenever we find something different, please don’t feel strange since they have their own customs and religious beliefs. Last but not least, keep a close eye on our belongings and we will be able to avoid unnecessary troubles.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

作文分析：本文是一篇建議性的作文，講述了人們在國外度假期間的不文明的現(xiàn)象，以及對此提出的建議。根據(jù)提綱要求向他們簡要描述一些不和諧現(xiàn)象，并在言行、守法、尊重風(fēng)俗、安全等方面提出幾點文明出游的建議。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等。

【亮點說明】

what some of us say，這是一句賓語從句，what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，并且采用了倒裝形式。it’s important that we should mind our behavior when using some public transport services，這句話中運用到了It be句型和when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句。同時文中運用了諸多亮彩的短語，比如：A growing number of，laugh at，Above all，As everyone know等等。同時文章結(jié)構(gòu)鮮明，首段概述了不文明的現(xiàn)象，第二段分三句話來提建議，分別運用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，進(jìn)行串聯(lián)，時整篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)鮮明，條理清楚。