Question

17．請(qǐng)講述一個(gè)關(guān)于你（或你的朋友）的父母對(duì)子女無(wú)私的愛(ài)的故事，寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文．主要內(nèi)容包括：
1、講述一個(gè)體現(xiàn)父母無(wú)私的愛(ài)的故事；
2、父母無(wú)私的愛(ài)對(duì)你（或你的朋友）帶來(lái)的影響；
3、你認(rèn)為作為兒女要如何回報(bào)父母的愛(ài)．
注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于120個(gè)；
2．不能使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
My friend，Tom，is disabled from birth，who can only move in a wheelchair．
我的朋友Tom從出生就有殘疾，他只能靠輪椅行動(dòng)．
高分句型二：
No one can deny that parents are the ones who love us most and deserve our deepest love．
沒(méi)有人能否認(rèn)父母是世界上最愛(ài)我們的人，他們應(yīng)當(dāng)?shù)玫轿覀冏钫鎿吹淖鹁春蛺?ài)．
高分句型一：
My friend，Tom，is disabled from birth，who can only move in a wheelchair．
我的朋友Tom從出生就有殘疾，他只能靠輪椅行動(dòng)．
高分句型二：
No one can deny that parents are the ones who love us most and deserve our deepest love．
沒(méi)有人能否認(rèn)父母是世界上最愛(ài)我們的人，他們應(yīng)當(dāng)?shù)玫轿覀冏钫鎿吹淖鹁春蛺?ài)．
句型一 who can only move in a wheelchair．該句是一個(gè)由who作關(guān)系代詞，且在從句中充當(dāng)主語(yǔ)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，替代前面出現(xiàn)的先行詞 Tom，注意此處不能使用that
句型二 ①that parents are the ones…該句是一個(gè)由that作引導(dǎo)詞的賓語(yǔ)從句，that在句中不作句中成分
       ②who love us most and deserve our deepest love 此處是一個(gè)由who 引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，在句中充當(dāng)主語(yǔ)，替代前面的先行詞the ones

解答 One possible version：
    Children are said to be a gift from God for parents．Therefore，most parents are grateful for this great gift and never hesitate to sacrifice for their children．My friend，Tom，is disabled from birth，who can only move in a wheelchair．（高分句型一）His parents devote all their love to him though most of their friends and relatives try to persuade them to give birth to one more child，which may at least ensure their happy life in their late years．Considerable difficulties are involved in looking after a disabled one，but Tom's parents make every effort to ensure he can live as happy a life as any normal child．Their devotion and selfless love make Tom an active，confident boy and a top student in school，the most promising one to be admitted to Beijing University．（列舉事實(shí)）
     Tom's story is but one of the moving stories between parents and children．No one can deny that parents are the ones who love us most and deserve our deepest love．（高分句型二）As children，we should always be thankful to their love and be ready to love them in return．（提出建議）

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