Question

16．假如你是李華，你的筆友Mike 從媒體上得知前段時(shí)間全國多地包括寧波等地出現(xiàn)霧霾，非常擔(dān)心，寫E-mail詢問有關(guān)情況，請你回復(fù)．回復(fù)應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1．實(shí)況描述        2．影響和成因      3．生活啟示
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100-120詞． E-mail的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
2．生詞：霧霾 haze
Dear Mike，
Thank you very much for your concern． 
…
                                             
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是書信類提綱作文，根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一封信．告知筆友Mike前段時(shí)間全國多地包括寧波等地出現(xiàn)霧霾的相關(guān)情況．
寫作要點(diǎn)：1實(shí)況描述．； 2．影響和成因；3．生活啟示；
時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱以第一和第二人稱為主．
重要短語：blanketed with（到處都是…），thank sb very much for sth（因…而感謝某人），as a result（所以），be crowded with （充滿 …），have problems with（有…問題），contribute to（促成…），protect our environment（保護(hù)環(huán)境），push on…（，奮力向前…），achieve…（取得…），at the cost of…（以…為代價(jià)）．
【高分句型一】
1．Many people，especially children and seniors，even found it difficult to breathe．
  此處是由"it"作形式賓語，結(jié)構(gòu)為"V+it+賓補(bǔ)"，動詞不定式為真正的賓語，且不定式用主動形式表被動含義．
【高分句型二】
2．As a result，local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs．
 此處是由關(guān)系代詞"who"引導(dǎo)的定語從句，先行詞為"people"，關(guān)系代詞"who"在定語從句中做主語．
【高分句型三】
1．To make a significant change，we really have to do more to protect our environment．
 此處是由不定式"to do"作目的狀語，主句為"we really have to do more to protect our environment"．
【高分句型四】
2．①To live a better life，we have to push on with the economy，②but it would be meaningless③if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air．
 ①此處是由不定式"to do"作目的狀語，主句為"we have to push on with the economy"．
       ②此處是由轉(zhuǎn)折連詞"but"引導(dǎo)的兩個(gè)并列句．
③此處是由連詞"if"引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，主句為"it would be meaningless"．

解答 Dear Mike，
Thank you very much for your concern．Recently many places in China including Ningbo were blanketed with thick yellow haze．Everything around disappeared from our sight．Some highways were closed．Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets．Many people，especially children and seniors，even found it difficult to breathe．【高分句型一】（實(shí)況描述）
As a result，local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs．【高分句型二】Part of the cause was the dry weather，but the severely damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare．（影響和成因）
To make a significant change，we really have to do more to protect our environment．【高分句型三】To live a better life，we have to push on with the economy，but it would be meaningless if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air．【高分句型四】（生活啟示）                                                                
                                                Yours，
                                                Li Hua

點(diǎn)評 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語和重要句型．