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5．假設(shè)你是李華．正在你校就讀的美國(guó)交換生湯姆在校園網(wǎng)上發(fā)帖，想找一個(gè)人作為假期游覽北京的導(dǎo)游．請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)給他寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：
1．表明意愿；
2．說(shuō)明理由．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右（開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Tom，
I learned from your post that you are looking for a guide for your trip to Beijing during the vacation．
                                                              
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫(xiě)一封電子郵件．表達(dá)自己想當(dāng)導(dǎo)游的意愿并說(shuō)明理由，寫(xiě)作時(shí)人稱(chēng)以第一人稱(chēng)和第二人稱(chēng)為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)為主．寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：1．表明意愿  2．說(shuō)明理由 
 亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明  be willing to  愿意做      public transportation公共交通  tourist attractions旅游景點(diǎn)    confident 自信的   have a good command of English 精通英語(yǔ)

解答 Dear Tom，
    I learned from your post that you are looking for a guide for your trip to Beijing during the vacation．I'm willing to guide you around the city．（表明意愿）
    I have been living in Beijing since I was born，so I know this city very well，including its public transportation，tourist attractions and local snacks．（高級(jí)句型）As I am very interested in the history and culture of Beijing，I have been to many famous tourist sports several times and I know them well，so I'm confident that I can give you a good introduction to them．（高級(jí)句型）In addition，I have a good command of English and am always ready enough to help you．（高級(jí)句型）（說(shuō)明理由）
    Looking forward to hearing from you．
Yours
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁．本文是議論文． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱(chēng)等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來(lái)，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫(xiě)、字母大小寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．