Question

最近中國多個地區(qū)出現(xiàn)霧霾天氣，某中學高三（3）班就此話題組織了一次班會活動，假設你是該班的通訊員，請根據(jù)以下信息寫一篇英文報道給學校刊物。

時間：2014.1.5下午第三節(jié)	地點：學校會議室	主持人：班長王濤
參與者：高三（3）班師生	主題：還我藍天白云
活動目的	認識日益嚴峻的空氣污染問題，增強環(huán)保意識。
活動流程	1. 利用PPT展示圖片及調(diào)查結(jié)果：空氣污染致我國每年約25萬人過早死亡，數(shù)萬兒童健康受危害； 2. 小組討論：如何應對霧霾天氣； 3. 班主任點評。
活動小結(jié)	……

【寫作要求】
只能用5個句子表達全部內(nèi)容。文章開頭已給出，不計入總句數(shù)。
【評分標準】
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章連貫。
As the atmospheric pollution worsens and the air quality declines, smog has occurred in many parts of China.      
                                                                                           
                                                                                            
                                                                                           
                                                                                           
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Answer 1

As the atmospheric pollution worsens and the air quality declines, smog has occurred in many parts of China. With the theme of “Bring back a blue sky and white clouds”, a class meeting hosted by our monitor Wang Tao was held in the Meeting Hall among all the teachers and students of Class 3, Senior3 during the 2nd section class on the afternoon of Jan. 5, 2014. The activity aimed to get the students informed of the fact of the increasingly serious hazy weather and raise our awareness of environmental protection.
In the class meeting, the PPT was used to present some pictures and related survey results, which show that air pollution in China causes about 250,000 early deaths per year and tens of thousands of children’ s health may get threatened. Then, we discussed in groups about how to deal with air pollution and then, our head teacher gave some comments.
It is the meeting that makes us aware of the importance of clean air and determine to help fight against air pollution.

試題分析：寫好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認真閱讀前面的提示，認清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。
【亮點說明】范文很好的表達了要點的內(nèi)容，使用了一些很好的詞組和句型： aimed to 旨在.. ，get sb. informed of“讓某人熟悉”deal with“處理”， In the class meeting, the PPT was used to present some pictures and related survey results, which show that air pollution in China causes about 250,000 early deaths per year and tens of thousands of children’ s health may get threatened. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句，It is the meeting that makes us aware of the importance of clean air and determine to help fight against air pollution. 這句話用了強調(diào)句。