Question

【題目】假如你是李明，你的外國朋友Tom 來信說他的健康出現(xiàn)了小問題－體重增加了，向你征求一些關(guān)于如何保持健康的建議。現(xiàn)在你給Tom 回封信，告訴他應(yīng)該如何保持健康。

要點包括：1. 注意飲食 2. 加強鍛煉 3.保證睡眠 4.保持好心情

注意：1.可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，使行文連貫。

2.詞數(shù)100左右

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom.

I feel honored to tell you something about health. Here are some tips to keep healthy.

Firstly, you need a healthy and balanced diet. Besides, don’t eat the foods containing too much sugar and fat, which will make you put on weight easily. Therefore, you should cut down the amount of them. It is important to form good living habits such as taking exercise regularly and having enough sleep; at the same time, for the benefit of your health, it is necessary for you to have enough rest. What’s more, it is of great help to you if you are in a good mood. So feeling good is important.

I’m looking forward to hearing your good news that you are improving your health.

Yours truly,

Li Min

【解析】本篇書面表達要求給朋友回信，介紹一些關(guān)于如何保持健康的建議。書信是同學(xué)們熟悉的寫作體裁，這使得文章的寫作更加容易。在寫作前要確定文章的時態(tài)和人稱，根據(jù)本文要求可以判斷應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時和第一人稱。寫作要點必須至少包括以下要點中的四項：1. 注意飲食 2. 加強鍛煉 3.保證睡眠 4.保持好心情。注意在寫作時需用適當(dāng)表示順序的詞來進行上下文的銜接，以增加文章的可讀性和層次性。此外，還要盡量使用高級詞匯和多種句式來提高文章檔次。

【亮點說明】范文語言精練，層次分明，上下文連貫。運用了較多高級句型和短語。Here are some tips to keep healthy.是倒裝句；…which will make you put on weight easily是定語從句；It is important to form good living habits和it is necessary for you to have enough rest是不定式作主語，it是形式主語；if you are in a good mood是狀語從句。高級詞匯和短語以及連接詞：feel honored to…；Firstly…Besides,…Therefore ；cut down；put on weight；taking exercise regularly；for the benefit of your health；of great help；in a good mood以及hearing from也提高了文章的可讀性。