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【題目】今年的6月21日是父親節(jié)。假設(shè)你是李華，請(qǐng)你寫一封信給你的父親，表達(dá)自己對(duì)父親的感激之情。要點(diǎn)如下：

1.父親為家庭任勞任怨，努力工作；

2.父親總是對(duì)未來(lái)充滿希望，不斷給孩子們“正能量”；

3.自己如何報(bào)答父親。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

3. 開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Dad,

I love you so much.

_____________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】Dear dad ,

I love you so much. You are always working so hard to support our family. Working overtime and even doing a second job at weekends, you manage to provide everything I need and a warm and loving home for all the family members. Over the years, you have never complained even once about our living conditions. Instead, you have made great effort to help us live a happy life. You are always so encouraging, hopeful, and determined to give us a better future. As a child of years, I am truly happy and proud. Following your example, I will try my best to repay you.

Happy Father’s Day to the world’s best dad！

Love,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文。今年的6月21日是父親節(jié)。寫一封信給你的父親，表達(dá)自己對(duì)父親的感激之情。文章內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出：a.父親為家庭任勞任怨，努力工作；b.父親總是對(duì)未來(lái)充滿希望，不斷給孩子們“正能量”；c.自己如何報(bào)答父親。同學(xué)們?cè)趯戇@篇文章時(shí)，要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1. 寫信表達(dá)自己對(duì)父親的感激之情以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)最合適。2. 要點(diǎn)要齊全。但是不要對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的羅列�？梢允褂眠m當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流程。注意表達(dá)對(duì)父親的感激之情與自己回報(bào)父親層層遞進(jìn)。3. 注意語(yǔ)氣。在父親節(jié)時(shí)表達(dá)對(duì)父親的感激之情與愛(ài)意，要帶有尊重與感謝感恩的語(yǔ)氣，感謝父親為家庭做出的貢獻(xiàn)。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

采用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)（Working overtime and even doing a second job at weekends, you manage to provide everything I need and a warm and loving home for all the family members.）和狀語(yǔ)從句（As a child of years, I am truly happy and proud. Following your example, I will try my best to repay you.）等高級(jí)句式。

采用了over the years；instead；made great effort等高級(jí)單詞或短語(yǔ)，增添文章看點(diǎn)。