Question

假如你是劉平，你的外國(guó)朋友Jim聽(tīng)說(shuō)你的學(xué)校正在進(jìn)行課改，來(lái)信咨詢有關(guān)情況，根據(jù)下列提供的信息，請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)封回信，談?wù)務(wù)n改實(shí)施后你們學(xué)校生活發(fā)生的變化。
課堂教學(xué)   課改前 聽(tīng)課、做筆記、枯燥乏味，做大量練習(xí)題
課改后 做大量習(xí)題
課改后 活動(dòng)豐富多彩：參加社會(huì)實(shí)踐，通過(guò)圖書(shū)館或因特網(wǎng)獲取信息
注意：1.詞數(shù)：100左右。
2.可以適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，但不能逐字逐句翻譯。
3.開(kāi)頭已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
參考詞匯：課改：curriculum reform
Dear Jim,
How nice to hear from you.You want to know what is going on in my school.Now I will tell you something about it .____________

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Jim,
How nice to hear from you. You want to know what is going on in my school. Now I will tell you something about it. In the past, teachers used to speak alone all the time in class , keeping us students busy making notes and leaving us no time to think for ourselves. As a result, what was taught in class was difficult to understand or to remember. The class was so dull that we gradually lost interest. And after school we were required to do a lot of exercises. Now, curriculum reform has made our school life colorful. We are active in class. In order to train the ability, we often do research and help each other. We have various after-class activities, such as singing, dancing, going to the library or surfing the Internet for various kinds of information. Our school life is getting more and more lively and interesting.
Best wishes.
Yours,
Liu ping

試題分析：根據(jù)內(nèi)容提示可知是以劉平的名義給你的外國(guó)朋友Jim寫(xiě)一封回信，內(nèi)容是課改實(shí)施后你們學(xué)校生活發(fā)生的變化。這里有一個(gè)課改前、后的對(duì)比，應(yīng)該用一般過(guò)去時(shí)和現(xiàn)在時(shí)兩種時(shí)態(tài)；人稱應(yīng)該是第一人稱為主。同時(shí)注意用不同的表達(dá)方式表述使句子長(zhǎng)短結(jié)合；還要選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞使文章具有一定的連貫性。最后必須認(rèn)真檢查是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】該文內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)齊全。并運(yùn)用了一些比較高級(jí)的表達(dá)。如動(dòng)詞的-ing形式keeping us students busy making notes and leaving us no time to think for ourselves.做結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)和 主語(yǔ)從句what was taught in class的運(yùn)用謂文章增色不少。另外句子的變化和銜接也不錯(cuò)。as a result、in order to等的使用都很恰當(dāng)。