Question

你身邊的不少同學(xué)喜歡用手機(jī)發(fā)短信、聽(tīng)音樂(lè)。有的同學(xué)喜歡周末上網(wǎng)玩游戲，影響了正常的學(xué)習(xí)。針對(duì)這個(gè)現(xiàn)象，你決定給校廣播站寫一篇稿件，倡議同學(xué)們要正確對(duì)待現(xiàn)代媒體。內(nèi)容包括：
1.列舉沉迷于現(xiàn)代媒體的現(xiàn)象；
2.提出合理化的建議。
注意：詞數(shù)100字左右。
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That’s all. Thank you!

Answer 1

Dear fellow students,
With the popularity of cell phones and the Internet, some of us students spend too much time playing with cell phones or computer games, which has negative effects on our studies.Worse still, we have little time to communicate with our parents and friends. Nor do we have time for physical exercises.
What shall we do to improve the situation? All of us should be fully aware of the harmful effects of modern media. Let’s limit our time of playing with cell phones or computer games. Instead we should spend more time playing sports or talking with our friends, which helps to relax and communicate with each other.
Let’s stay away from modern media. Let’s take action now!
That’s all. Thank you!

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)。要求給校廣播站寫一篇稿件，倡議同學(xué)們要正確對(duì)待現(xiàn)代媒體。內(nèi)容包括： 1.列舉沉迷于現(xiàn)代媒體的現(xiàn)象；2.提出合理化的建議。這只是一個(gè)提綱，沒(méi)有具體的內(nèi)容，難度上增加了，要求在提綱的基礎(chǔ)上進(jìn)行拓展，豐富文章內(nèi)容，審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述要盡量選擇簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言，運(yùn)用合適的語(yǔ)法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文圍繞兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)展開(kāi)，句式長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，句式多變：With the popularity of cell phones and the Internet, some of us students spend too much time playing with cell phones or computer games, which has negative effects on our studies. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， Nor do we have time for physical exercises.這句話用了倒裝句， Instead we should spend more time playing sports or talking with our friends, which helps to relax and communicate with each other.這句話也使用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。而且使用了一些短語(yǔ)：be fully aware of 充分意識(shí)到，stay away from 遠(yuǎn)離，take action采取行動(dòng)，Worse still更糟糕的是。