Question

假如你是一名失學兒童，名叫李華，你有幸得到在中國工作的Mr. Brown的資助，可以重返校園。你給Mr. Brown寫了一封信，內容如下：
　　★ 收到錢和書后能重返校園，非常感激；
　　★ 在老師的幫助下，學習有了很大的進步，受到老師的表揚和鼓勵；
　　★ 決心更加努力學習，取得更大的進步；
　　★ 盼望見到Mr. Brown，希望他寄來一張照片。
注意：1. 書信應包括以上所有要點，可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；2. 詞數：100左右

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Brown，
　  I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me. I could not have returned to school without your help. Thank you so much.
I have been working hard since I went back to school. I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers. They often praise me and encourage me. But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education. I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress.
How are you getting on with your life and work? I would like to meet you in person, but I have no opportunity to do so. Would you please send me a photo of yourself?
Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua　

試題分析：考查提綱類書面表達：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達出來. 動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題。本作文中給出的要點比較具體,故需要準確表達.寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化。平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯系以外，還可以適當記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮點說明】范文中出現一些常見的短語：returned to 返回某處； made great progress取得進步； with the help of 在某人幫助下；made up my mind to下定決心做某事； getting on with與某人相處如何； have no opportunity to do 沒有機會做某事。I have been working hard since I went back to school.這句話中考查現在完成時。But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education.這句話中運用對過去的虛擬語氣。I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress這個句子運用兩個比較級，前后相互呼應。