Question

請你代表你班同學(xué)給校長寫一封信，反映一下你校食堂的幾點(diǎn)問題，以引起學(xué)校重視，并針對問題提出2條合理建議。
菜價(jià)昂貴，菜式單一
排隊(duì)時(shí)間長，浪費(fèi)午休時(shí)間
味道不佳，浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象嚴(yán)重
提示詞：食堂 canteen
Dear Principal,
Recently, many students are discussing the problems of the canteen.
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I sincerely hope you can adopt my suggestions. Thank you!
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Principal,
Recently, many students are discussing the problems of the canteen. Some students think the prices of dishes are too expensive and the choices of the dishes are too limited. Another concern is that the time spent on waiting is so long that we have less time to have a rest. Meanwhile, some students argue that the taste of the food is awful which leads to a lot of waste.
Therefore, measures need to be taken to improve the conditions of the canteen. In my own point of view, I pay more attention to the prices of the food and the time wasted in the queue. I think we can offer various choices with different prices and open more service windows to reduce waiting time.
I sincerely hope you can adopt my suggestions. Thank you!
Yours,
Li Hua

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【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文中出現(xiàn)一些常見短語have a rest休息， leads to導(dǎo)致， take measures to do采取措施做某事， pay more attention to注意。Another concern is that the time spent on waiting is so long that we have less time to have a rest這是個(gè)復(fù)合句，第一個(gè)that引導(dǎo)表語從句，第二個(gè)that 與so 連用，so +adj that 如此又至于，spent on waiting做the time 的后置定語。In my own point of view, I pay more attention to the prices of the food and the time wasted in the queue在這個(gè)句子中wasted in the queue做the time的后置定語。I think we can offer various choices with different prices and open more service windows to reduce waiting time這個(gè)句中think后面跟著賓語從句，and連接offer ,open 兩個(gè)并列的謂語動詞。
考點(diǎn)： 提綱類作文