Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是李華，你的叔叔最近因為吸煙而得了肺病。請你根據(jù)以下要點提示給他寫一封信勸他戒煙。

1．想吸煙的時候，可以試著喝些水或吃些健康的小吃；

2．遠離平時經(jīng)常一起吸煙的朋友。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Uncle,

I'm sorry to know that you are ill. We all know smoking does great harm to our health, and I think you'd better give up smoking as soon as possible. Firstly, whenever you want to smoke, try drinking some water or eating some healthy snacks. Secondly, maybe you have some friends who often smoke with you. Stay away from them.

My father used to smoke heavily and once had a serious lung disease, but now he has given up smoking and is living a healthy life. So give up smoking right now. I hope you will do it!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本篇書面表達屬于應用文，要求寫一封信。

第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本篇為一封信，要求給患有肺病的叔叔寫一封信勸他戒煙。時態(tài)應為一般現(xiàn)在時。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如：do harm to，give up，try doing sth，stay away from等。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

【亮點說明】

范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。作者在范文中使用了較多高級表達方式，如狀語從句whenever you want to smoke, try drinking some water or eating some healthy snacks.定語從句maybe you have some friends who often smoke with you等。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。