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【題目】過生日互贈禮物在中學生中似乎成為一種時尚，甚至有的學生還去飯店搞生日聚會。對此同學們有不同的看法。假設你是王平，請你根據(jù)下表提示，給某英語報社的編輯寫一封信，并談談自己的觀點。

贊成	為同學們提供交際機會；利于增進同學之間的友誼；學習之余可以放松心情。
反對	容易造成對時間和金錢的浪費；導致攀比；對青少年學習和成長造成不利影響。
你的觀點	......

注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100左右（信的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)。）

2. 短文須包括表中的全部內(nèi)容，可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

3. 參考詞匯：攀比：keep up with the Joneses

Dear Editor,

I'm a middle school student named Wang Ping. Recently, we often have to buy

presents for our

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Editor,

I'm a middle school student named Wang Ping. Recently, we often have to buy presents for our classmates' birthdays, and sometimes, we are invited to their birthday parties in expensive hotels, which caused us to think whether students should spend so much money for birthdays.

About this there are two different views. Some students think it provides us with a good chance to communicate with each other and develop our friendship, and besides, we can relax after hard work at school. However, some other students think it's a waste of money and time and can lead us to getting into the bad habit of trying to keep up with the Joneses, which has a bad effect on our growth and studies.

As far as I'm concerned, it's not easy for our parents to make money and keep us at school for education. So there is no need for us to do like that. We must treasure our parents' labor and put our hearts into our studies.

What do you think about it? I'm expecting your reply.

Yours,

Wang Ping

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達屬于書信類寫作，根據(jù)提示信息和題目要求來展開。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)。寫作書信時一定要注意文章結(jié)構(gòu)和層次，提出建議時要具有說服力，對于一些常用的動詞，要注意其其他形式以更為簡練的表達自己的觀點，要靈活運用各種短語和從句來豐富文章的內(nèi)容。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如Recently, we often have to buy presents for our classmates' birthdays, and sometimes, we are invited to their birthday parties in expensive hotels, which caused us to think whether students should spend so much money for birthdays是which引導的非限制性定語從句和whether引導的賓語從句。However, some other students think it's a waste of money and time and can lead us to getting into the bad habit of trying to keep up with the Joneses, which has a bad effect on our growth and studies是which引導的非限制性定語從句。As far as I'm concerned, it's not easy for our parents to make money and keep us at school for education. 是it引導的主語性從句。So there is no need for us to do like that使用了there is no need to的句型。此外，文章還使用了大量短語are invited to，communicate with each other and develop our friendship，getting into the bad habit of，keep up with，put our hearts into等。插入語About this there are two different views，However，As far as I'm concerned，so的使用使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，也使語言更加連貫。