Question

【題目】短文寫(xiě)作

假如你是李華，你的外國(guó)朋友Jim問(wèn)你什么是“廣場(chǎng)舞”。請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一封回信介紹：

1. 什么是廣場(chǎng)舞；

2. 廣場(chǎng)舞的利與弊；

3. 你認(rèn)為該如何協(xié)調(diào)老年人健身的需求與其他人休息的需要。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開(kāi)頭與結(jié)語(yǔ)已給出，不算入字?jǐn)?shù)。

Dear Jim,

I’ve received your letter inquiring square dancing.

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Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Jim,

I’ve received your letter inquiring square dancing.

In China, some retired people gather on the square or in the park to dance together in the early morning or evening. People call it square dancing. It is a good way of keeping fit, especially for the elderly. However, the noise caused by the loud music really affects the normal life and study of residents living nearby. Besides, square dancing takes up too many public places, like parks and squares, annoying other users. Considering the current situation, I think that the dancers should keep the music down to an acceptable level, and arrange their dancing time properly. What’s more, in order to reduce the inconvenience to others, organizers should carefully choose suitable places to dance in and more importantly, dancers and residents should learn to tolerate, understand and respect each other.

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本次作文要求寫(xiě)回信向外國(guó)朋友Jim介紹什么是“廣場(chǎng)舞”。要點(diǎn)包括：1.什么是廣場(chǎng)舞；2.廣場(chǎng)舞的利與弊；3.你認(rèn)為該如何協(xié)調(diào)老年人健身的需求與其他人休息的需要。故既要完成任務(wù)，又要兼顧形式的要求。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：本篇條理清楚，要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。其句式上的變化既使得文章生動(dòng)而流暢，也體現(xiàn)了作者駕馭句式的能力。例如：非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的用法caused by the loud music，annoying other users，Considering the current situation等；賓語(yǔ)從句that the dancers should keep the music down to an acceptable level。keeping fit，affects the normal life，acceptable level，reduce the inconvenience等詞匯及However, Besides, What’s more, more importantly 等連接詞。