Question

       星光中學(xué)（Xingguang High School）近期舉行了一次登山活動(dòng)。假定你是學(xué)校英語(yǔ)報(bào)記者，請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一篇短文，報(bào)道此次活動(dòng)。內(nèi)容包括：

       1.    時(shí)間與地點(diǎn)：4月10日，大青山（Daqing Mountain）；

       2.    活動(dòng)的過(guò)程；

       3.    你對(duì)于這次活動(dòng)的評(píng)論。

注意：  1. 詞數(shù)120左右。

              2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Answer 1

題型分析

江西卷的書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作，要求學(xué)生就一次登山活動(dòng)寫(xiě)一篇新聞報(bào)道，是學(xué)生比較熟悉的題材。報(bào)道類文章要條理清楚，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)煉、突出重點(diǎn)。文章開(kāi)頭的第一段或第一句話要扼要地揭示出活動(dòng)內(nèi)容。文章的主體部分要用充足的事實(shí)來(lái)展現(xiàn)活動(dòng)的過(guò)程，最后對(duì)活動(dòng)發(fā)表自己的評(píng)論。

審題要素

寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)注意下面幾點(diǎn)：

（1）注意人稱，應(yīng)該用第一人稱。

（2）注意時(shí)態(tài)的正確使用：以過(guò)去時(shí)為主。

（3）注意發(fā)揮想象力，詳實(shí)敘述活動(dòng)中發(fā)生的事情。。

思路導(dǎo)引

首先，交代活動(dòng)的目的、參與者和時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)。（take exercise; take part in）

其次，敘述登山活動(dòng)的過(guò)程。（gather; set out/off; enjoy; scenery; help each other; climb;  reach; cheer）

最后，對(duì)活動(dòng)進(jìn)行評(píng)價(jià)。（benefit; get close to; relax; promote/ build up）

標(biāo)準(zhǔn)范文

In order to encourage the students to take outdoor exercise, our school organized a mountain-climbing on April 10. Hundreds of us took part in it.

       It was a nice day. At 8:00 am, we gathered at the foot of Daqing Moutain and set out for the top in high spirits. Al the way we were chatting, singing and laughing, enjoying the fresh air and the beautiful scenery. When some fell behind, others would come and offer help. About 2 hours later, we all reached the top. Bathed in sunshine, we jumped and cheered with joy.

       The activity benefited us a lot. Not only did it get us close to nature and give us relaxation from heavy school work, it also promoted the friendship among us. What a wonderful time !

賞析：

重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)	take outdoor exercise戶外鍛煉；take part in 參加；參與；set out for出發(fā)前往；fall behind 落后；get close to 靠近；接近；
高級(jí)句型	In order to..., our school organized... 為了...，我們學(xué)校組織了....（目的狀語(yǔ)） Not only did it..., it also promoted....它不僅...而且...（倒裝句）