Question

【題目】假如你是李華，前不久你在網上買了一條絲綢圍巾，打算送給媽媽作為生日禮物，卻在收貨時發(fā)現(xiàn)存在一些問題。請你就此給網站寫一封投訴信。

要點如下：1.介紹情況；2.反應問題；3.提出解決方法。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右 2.可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear sir or Madam,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir/Madam,

I am one of your customers. Recently, I ordered a silk scarf for my mum as a birthday gift . To my disappointment, there are the following problems.

To begin with, it didn’t arrive on schedule, which missed my mum’s birthday and let me down. Besides, it is of the wrong color, which should be blue instead of red. Sadly, my mum hates red the most! What bothers me the most is the quality of the scarf. It is not made of genuine silk and even gives off a bad smell, making the whole thing absolutely unacceptable!

I am not satisfied to have received such poor service, hoping that you can return my money or deliver a new one to me .I’d appreciate it if you can take it into consideration.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours

Lihua

【解析】

本文屬于提綱作文。

第一步：審題

假如你是李華，前不久你在網上買了一條絲綢圍巾，打算送給媽媽作為生日禮物，卻在收貨時發(fā)現(xiàn)存在一些問題。請你就此給網站寫一封投訴信。一、仔細閱讀有關提點包括：1、介紹情況；2、反映存在的問題；3、提出解決方案。在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象，要依據提示情景或詞語，按照要點所給的順序寫。時態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時。

第二步：關鍵詞組

to my disappointment讓我失望的是；let sb. down讓某人失望；be made of 由…組成；give off釋放；be satisfied to對…不滿意；take sth. into consideration.考慮…等

第三步：遣詞造句

To my disappointment, there are the following problems.

To begin with, it didn’t arrive on schedule, which missed my mum’s birthday and let me down.

I am not satisfied to have received such poor service.等

此外，應該意使用較高級的詞匯和句子的衍接，以提高作文的檔次。寫作中適當使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密符合邏輯關系。也不要拘泥于要點的表達，可以適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當選用表示因果遞進、轉折關系的連接詞語等。